Sink And Swim

A poem that does not turn out to be about what it seems.

Escaping this sinking ship,

I find the nearest exit.

Jump…

Overboard.

Not sure whether I will make it out alive.

Back into the sea,

I swim.

Fish bite at my feet

I ignore it, just for now.

Later, I will address the issue.

For now, my only goal is to swim.

Find another boat to climb aboard

But there are none.

Not a single ship, boat, or any form of life raft around me

Only vast ocean

What have I done? Was this a mistake?

I have no way of getting back to the sinking ship

It has already descended

Down into the deep, where the dark lurks

If I were to return

I would not be able to breath, not one gasp of air could reach me.

Why go back to such a hollow end?

Does it seem better than swimming alone in this sea?

No.

It does not. I move on.

One thing that I have to tell you,

Is that this ship…

It never really did exist.

It was only in my head.

It seemed so strong to me.
It seemed so safe.

But now I want you to know,

It was not even a ship…

But a man.

A man I have now escaped.

Author's Note

Its a bit choppy, but I hope you enjoy!

Reviews

[Lee]

This has a nice contemplative nature to it. Makes the reader pause Life momentarily and ponder slight.

While the surprise at the end did initiate this thought provoking quality, it also felt sort of rushed through. And this somewhat negated all that you stated before. Despite it, the emotion held strong and I appreciated this.
nice work, well enjoyed.

[Natasha]

Wow. I didn't anticipate that ending. Since you're writing free verse poetry (or at least I believe you are), you don't need to worry about choppy. There's no set rules for this form. The greatest part of this poem is the slight twist of humor which is thrown into it.

Fish bite at my feet

I ignore it, just for now.

Later, I will address the issue



That was great!