Death

it's suppose to be my first TANKA, I hope you like it

there is no comfort

in sightless soliloquy,

bones pillowed in dirt

with tickling inflicting worms

and bleak silhouttes of woe.

Author's Note

I visited my grandpa's grave today and I just had some contemplation on death and how mysterious it is.
How can someone that you knew so well can just leave and perish and we'll all have to face it too.

Reviews

[Shane Mohamed]

I'm not familiar with that style of poetry, but it was very captivating. You drew me in. It definitely was dark, but that's my favorite style of writing. Great job. A+

[Sami Khalil]

"there is no comfort
in sightless soliloquy,
bones pillowed in dirt
with tickling inflicting worms
and bleak silhouettes of woe."

[Jamil Isimbabi]

wow. think about this sometimes, you nailed the description here in so few words. :) may he rest in peace

[Anne Timmins]

Good stuff here and it is an incredibly touching piece.

[Baby Ricochet]

This Tanka is quite good. Makes sense yet mysterious. Great job. The death I'm most familiar with is of the extremely violent Variety. I never found it particularly mysterious nor did I see any beauty in any of it. Often it was instantaneous and it was easier to deal with if it wasn't someone from my Platoon. Sometimes it didn't turn out that way. This really is a good Tanka though. My experience with death doesn't have anything to do with yours. I recognize that. Keep writing Latifa. You do have skills.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Nailed like a punch from a champion boxer. What a wallop!

[Avinash]

Thanks for inviting us to this very personal write. Really enjoyed reading. Yes death is mysterious and it will remain, as long as we are alive.

[Ashira Macy]

This was so sad, and I know what you mean, there is not a lot of comfort in being near someone's grave. If anything it is a reminder that the person you once loved is gone. Vivid imagery in here made it all the more powerful. Great work. I have never done a tank myself.

[John Anderson]

very beautifully expressed. Nice work!

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful words and description. Artwork and words. Told a story about death and the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote