an open prison

it's been a while since I've written anything, so this is just a humble free verse that came to my mind to express some negative energy that is rising inside me.

A maze of rage unriddled to peace,

 NO, not yet it won't!

the veins are still clogged with questions;

the face still plastic in perfection

where hands are wrinkled with frosting deficit;

the veins are still clogged with questions.

No clock, No seconds, No time

shall unclog the questions,

she needs oxygen of another planet to freshen up

she'll climb to stars if she'll have to.

No dreams,No hopes, No faulty imaginations,

the hazy truth is floating around,

while everyone is blinded by sluggish,

flecks of mumbling thoughts are imprinting the maps of

resolution from within:

she'll fight the ordinary and settles for the unknown

for she may embodies freedom in the unknown.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

she needs oxygen of another planet to freshen up
she'll climb to stars if she'll have to.
These lines really stuck out for me - so indicative of that "prison" and the urge to escape it. Well done.

[redflutterby]

We all long to be free even if it means heading into the unknown. Thanks for sharing...

[Parimal Pratyush]

Great work. Deep. Really appreciable.

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here is the mix of line length, of pace. A writer I like.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review.

[Ruth]

I do love the searching in this piece...poignantly driven love :)

[Latifa]

thank you Poppy..:)...

[Pryde Foltz]

she'll fight the ordinary and settles for the unknown
for she may embodies freedom in the unknown.

A free soul is the ultimate piece of freedom.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review Pryde

[kollaboratyve]

Nicely done! when we failed to think for ourselves,we become robots programmed to follow the status quo.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Sami Khalil]

Latifa, you know I have to come visit and see the masterful works you are sharing.

"another planet to freshen up

she'll climb to stars if she'll have to.

No dreams,No hopes, No faulty imaginations,

the hazy truth is floating around,"

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)......

[Namrata]

she'll fight the ordinary and settles for the unknown
for she may embodies freedom in the unknown.

I relate to this lines very much, well penned. Except for a few words which could have been more perfect, I liked the outspoken, intrepid nature of the poem.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[A. Amos]

You took your time and the result is visible in this poetry! Somply amazing...

[Latifa]

thank you for the review