rubies

We are
so
different.
Your heart pumps rubies,
but mine grinds emerald and sapphire
into sharp, bright dust.
It churns with 
the drumming heartbeat, 
and it rips along the wall 
of every
thin
canal.

(4/5/2013)

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Reviews

[Cerulean]

I really liked this. At first, when I read it through my first thought was it was a poem about how one person pumps out love, while the other grinds on jealousy. I'm still not completely sure, but it's my concept of it. Of course, it could just be that people will see it differently :)

What really gave it a heads up was that it was simple, but the flow was really good. When it came to the 'Churning' part I felt the poem somehow gain more power. That's what I like best about short poems, it gives each person a slightly different meaning, and seems to grow on them as the poem accelates ^^

I also love the metaphors used in this; and that each word seems to hold its own meaning different from the definitions in the dictionary. Great piece of Art :) :) :)