A Poem by Brooklyn

My history class just watched The Patriot and this poem is about the evil Colonel on the British side. Nothing against British. Only this guy.


Don’t you feel?

Doesn’t anything beat under your chest?

How can you watch

As the people fall dead?

And knowing you caused it!

How can you live with yourself?

I can’t comprehend.


How your soul must cry out,

Tattered to shreds.

Fate worse than life in fear

Awaits you, fiend.


How can you see

Your enemy’s eyes dull?

And bear to spend

Even a second more in this world?

How those eyes must haunt you,

Long after your vengeance is fulfilled.


Don’t you care about their lives?

Don’t you care about their worth?

Unalienable rights denied in a bloody massacre.

Do wonder about what they might have been like

If only you knew them more?

Do you wonder if their blood would stain your hands

In a different universe?

© 2012 Brooklyn

Author's Note

I bet your wondering why I found a need to write a poem about this guy. Well, I cried a LOT during this movie and most of it was because of this guy's pure evilness. And that emotion had to go somewhere afterwords so....into a poem! Solution to every problem

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This is wicked good! it reminds me of Columbine that I'm currently reading. Good job though, This kind of stuff is quite upsetting and i wonder what makes people go on a rampage like that.

Posted 6 Years Ago

A wonderful write! I think I felt a tear run down my face! :D 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago

Wow!!! Amazing poem!! I'm getting sad just reading this!! :(

Posted 7 Years Ago

I didnt see this movie in history, so I dont know if I really get it 100% but a lot of characters go through this when they kill only once, nevermind more than that. Nice job :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

Your poem reflects the feelings that most people have toward violence and killing. Our God given conscience feels horror and outrage when we see or read about atrocities. Of course, that's when our conscience has been trained and not scarred over, allowing the existence of Hitlers and Jonestown. Your poem is heartfelt and asks the questions we all should be asking.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Posted 7 Years Ago

Wow Brooklyn this is beautiful, it really got me thinking.
Love it 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago

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