Freedom

what is freedom?

A dove could have flew if not of the hunters.
The river could have its water flowing continuously
if not of the blocking trashes.
An innocent prisoner could have bail out
if not of the metal bars hindering him from sovereignty.
A kid could have enjoyed his childhood
if not of his over-protective parents.
A slave could have been liberated
if not of his overpowering superiors.

Freedom, a two-syllable word.
Too easy to be pronounced,
yet, a great challenge to win.
Freedom, a seven-letter word.
Extremely easy to be written down.
Yet, too hard to acquire.
Freedom, a simple significant word.
Very common.
Yet, a great milestone.
Freedom, that's what all of us needed.
But the more we strive for it,
the more we are placed into bondage.
Freedom, one thing I'm longing for.
Yet, I can't acquire.
Freedom,one of the most important thing in this world.
So let's appreciate the prior freedom
we are able to obtain.

Author's Note

Define freedom.

Reviews

[mhaie]

"The only absolute freedom is the freedom to think"

[Pax]

Kabayan, freedom is everywhere...
what we must master is freedom of self control, moderation is everything, its a balance of our own beings...
A kid could have enjoyed his childhood
if not of his over-protective parents.
~although i disagree with that statement at some point in some parts i agree for not everything in that statement is wrong or right... either way its debatable...and actually the first stanza can arise many questions and debatable answers...
the last stanza is great pondering..
keep writing kabaya.... this is great...

[bryandc15]

thanks Sir, (as how I wanted to call you).... You're really good in writing so I think You deserve to be called "Sir"

I'm sorry for those glaring errors I've commit...
Honestly, I never thought this piece was good. I'm Not even thinking that this deserves to be published. But later I found myself nowhere writing this piece...

[Pax]

thank you, I'm not that good... I have a very low self esteem kabayan... so don't worry about the errors I'm totally blind on grammars....ang point ko is... wala namang masama sa poem mo ...everything is great despite the contradictions and that makes this poem attractive...freedom is a big word... think big, think all the what if's ... don't be down your doing great on what you do already... keep penning kabayan...

[bryandc15]

I'll do Sir!

[lee von cleef]

Captivity for all.

[KAOlmsted]

Speaking frankly, I think you could lose the first stanza entirely and just go with the second, because it is the more powerful message. The first stanza is rather jumbled in its thoughts (in my opinion) Thank you so much for the RR; I will read more of your work.

[gombeggar]

...and freedom is an illusion except perhaps in the mind

[bryandc15]

thanks...

[gombeggar]

A dove could have flew if not of the hunters. ...'flew', although i perfer using; that congigation is out of sync here... try 'a dove that flew, if not of (or for) the hunters'

the rest of the poem is a wonderful expression of escape and freedom...i especially like the first line of the 2nd stanza. 'freedom, a two-syllable word.' and the whole read from there on

[kublakhan27]

All I know about freedom is that, whatever it is, it isn't free...a bit of a thematic departure for you which of course is never a bad thing for a writer haha Well done :)

[chuna]

good job,,,
freedom is...
anywhere!
thanks for sharing your poem,,,

[STRAND]

The message is straightforward despite the diction and errors. It almost has a translated or english-as-a-second-language feel to it. I would advise to review, maybe get a different set of eyes or read aloud to eliminate so many glaring errors.

[bryandc15]

I'M SORRY.... sorry for the CAPS