Issue #2

Issue #2

A Chapter by Brytt
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Comic Issue Two: War efforts increase, Introduction of Jax

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Page One

 

Panel

 

1.  Evan waves to a group of teens near a cinema.  They wave back.  Evan is smiling, carefree, with a backpack over one shoulder.  He has a purple sock hat, black sweatpants, and bright yellow sweatshirt.

 

                        EMBER (Internal Monologue)

              What does it mean to be normal?

 

2.  Lizzy -- pigtails now, in a black skirt that reaches just past her knees, and a blue blouse -- sits in a chair with a packet of papers.

 

                        EMBER (Internal Monologue)

              If everyone is different, like they say we are…

 

3.  Lizzy’s hands as she grips the papers tighter.

 

                        SECRETARY (Voice Over)

              Elizabeth Vaughn-Shroedër?

 

                        EMBER (Internal Monologue)

              …does such a concept even exist?

 

4.  Ember lays on the blue-grey couch in the Vaughn-Shroedër living room.  She crosses her arms behind her head and looks at the ceiling.

 

                        EMBER (Internal Monologue)

              Because I’m not normal. Not even close.

 

Transition: DUAL CONTROL: FOREIGN

 

Page Two

 

1.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër stands in the doorway of the living room.  Ember does not move.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër grins innocently at Ember.

 

                        VAUGHN-SHROEDËR

              Ember, hold down the fort for me, okay?

 

                        EMBER

              Whatever.

 

2.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër vanishes.  Ember closes her eyes.

 

3.  Ember’s eyes snap back open in realization.

 

                        (Transition)

              He’s building something…

 

Page Three

 

1.  Ember’s silhouette in a doorway overlooking a tall staircase.  Behind her is a yellow light.  The staircase looks old and the walls are grey brick.

 

2.  Ember takes a step onto the staircase.  Show only one bare, electronic foot.  (SFX: KKRIIIIIIKKK!).

 

3.  Ember continues down the stairs (SFX: KRIK! KRAK! KRK!  KRIK!).

 

                        EMBER (Internal Monologue)

              The doctor really needs to fix these stairs.

 

4.  (SFX:  TTP TPP THP).  Ember looks up, surprised.

 

                        EMBER

              Hmm?

 

Page Four

 

1.  Ember holds up her cybernetic left arm, which glows slightly.  She looks nervous.  Only a few items, wires and scraps, are visible in the light.

 

                        EMBER

              He-h-hello?

 

2.  A glowing green eye looks out from behind a large shelf holding spark plugs and different kinds of batteries.  A pale human hand touches the side of the shelf.

 

                        EMBER (Voice Over)

              Is s-somebody here?

 

3.  (SFX: SHHRRRFF).  Ember turns towards the noise, her arm now lit up brightly, illuminating the whole room.  She grins, as if triumphant.

 

                        EMBER

              Ah-ha!

 

4.  The glowing eye and human hand are no longer by the shelf, but Ember moves towards it, determined that she has found the source.

 

Page Five

 

1.  Ember stands next to the shelf, still holding up her arm for light.  She now looks thoroughly terrified.

 

                        EMBER

              I-I know you’re there!

 

2.  Ember’s foot hits a large coil of wire.

 

                        EMBER

              Ack!

 

3.  Ember moves backwards, but she trips over something.

 

4.  Ember falls towards the shelf.

 

                        EMBER

              Aah-aahh!

 

Page Six

 

1.  Dust flies off the shelf as it falls over, and Ember follows it down.  (SFX: KUH-KRRRSHH!).

 

2.  Dust clouds the air as Ember lies on top of the wreckage she has created.  She coughs (SFX: KUFF!  KUF-KUFF!).

 

3.  A shadowy figure kneels next to Ember, barely noticeable through the dust.  It looks vaguely human.

 

Page Seven

 

1.  Ember looks up as a pale hand reaches through the debris.  She seems surprised.

 

2.  Ember puts her own hand in the other.

 

3.  The hand pulls Ember out of the wreckage slowly.  The flying dust begins to settle a bit.  Ember coughs slightly (SFX: KMF-KUFF!).

 

4.  Ember collapses in front of a human figure in dark blue cargo pants and a black t-shirt.

 

5.  Ember looks up shakily.

 

Page Eight

 

1.  Ember looks up at JAX -- a youthful boy in his late teens or early twenties.  He has emerald green eyes and black hair that hangs in loose waves around his face.  He is also pale and covered in dust.  A set of large dog tags hang around his neck.  His face is expressionless.

 

Page Nine

 

1.  Ember looks confused.  Her body shakes beneath her in shock.

 

                        EMBER

              Who…?

 

2.  Ember passes out.  Jax’s eyes widen.

 

3.  Jax looks up the stairs, his hands resting lightly on his knees.  Ember is still limp in front of him.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR (Voice Over)

              Ember?  Where did you go?  Ember!

 

4.  Jax taps on the floor twice: (SFX: KNUK KNUK).

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR (Voice Over)

              Jax?  I told you to stay hidden!

 

Page Ten

 

1.  Jax picks up Ember as Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër (SFX: KRK KRAK KRIK KRAK) appears on the stairs.  He is holding a small, boxy contraption in one hand.  His face is worried when he sees Ember.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR

              Bring her upstairs, Jax.  Quickly!

 

2.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër runs back up the steps.  (SFX: KRIK KRAAK KRK KRK KRIK).  Jax carries Ember to the stairs.

 

Page Eleven

 

1.  Ember lies on the couch in the living room once more.  She is still asleep but stirring.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR (Voice Over)

              Hold still, I’m not finished!

 

2.  Ember opens her eyes.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR (Voice Over)

              Almost got it…

 

3.  Jax is sitting in a dining chair near the couch, looking at the ceiling.  A fleshy panel on his neck is open, and Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër is looking into it and fixing something.

 

4.  Ember sits up with a startled look.

 

                        EMBER

              Doctor?

 

Page Twelve

 

1.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër closes the panel and looks at Ember.  He smiles.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR

              There you are, Ember!

 

2.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër turns back to Jax, who touches his throat.  The panel that was in his neck is now unnoticeable.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR

              That should do it, Jax.  Try it out!

 

3.  Jax looks over at Ember as she stares at him in shock.  He brushes some hair from his eyes.

 

                        JAX

              Hello, Miss Ember.

 

Page Thirteen

 

1.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër Smiles brightly.  Jax glances at him.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR

              BRILLIANT!  IT WORKS!

 

2.  Ember leans close to Jax, who remains expressionless.  She puts her fingers to her lips.

 

                        EMBER

              What is it?

 

3.  Neither Ember nor Jax make a movement.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR (Voice Over)

              He‘s a body guard.  I made him.

 

4.  Jax smirks.  Ember’s eyes widen.

 

                        JAX

              I am Jax, a guardian and friend of Miss Lizzy Vaughn-Shroedër.

 

Page Fourteen

 

1.  All three turn with fearful surprise as a voice yells out.  Small panel.

 

                        LIZZY

              DAD!

 

2.  Lizzy stands by the front door, which swings open behind her.  She’s kicking off high-heeled shoes (SFX: THONK!  THRNK!).  She does not even look up because she is worn down from walking in the heels.

 

                        LIZZY

              You forgot the money for the trip back!

 

Page Fifteen

 

1.  Lizzy looks up and sees Jax, who grins again.  Lizzy looks a bit surprised, but not shocked.

 

                        LIZZY

              Umm…

 

2.  Lizzy crosses her arms.

 

                        LIZZY

              Explain.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR (Voice Over)

              Well, uh…

 

3.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër shrugs, disappointed.  Ember puts her hands on her hips and glares at him.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër looks at the floor.

 

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR

              I, ah, thought maybe he could, um…

 

4.  Lizzy’s eyes widen, but her arms stay crossed.  She seems stunned by her father’s answer.  Jax returns to an emotionless state.

 

                        DR. VAUGHN-SHROEDËR (Voice Over)

              …protect you?

 

Page Sixteen

 

1.  Lizzy storms past Ember and Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër.  Jax and Ember watch her leave.  Dr. Vaughn-Shroedër continues to stare at the floor.

 

2.  Jax stands up to go after Lizzy, but Ember pushes him back (left arm).  Other than that, no one moves.

 

3.  Jax sits down again, but Ember stands up.  Jax watches her now.

 

4.  Ember leaves the room.

 

Page Seventeen

 

1.  In the kitchen, Lizzy sits at the table with a box of chocolate cakes (like Hostess, only that’s copyrighted, so they will be “Miss Daisy” brand!).  She’s reaching into the box and looks frustrated.  There is a doorway and several cabinets behind her (this is where Ember was sitting Issue 1, Page 24, Panel 2).

 

                        LIZZY

              Knew it… I knew… I knew it!

 

2.  Lizzy pulls the plastic-wrapped treat out, still muttering furiously.  Ember appears in the doorway behind her looking worried.

 

                        LIZZY

              What with the- the recruiting, a-an’ the s-soldiers an’ the interview, I-

 

3.  Lizzy pulls the plastic off the cake and yells at it.  Ember remains calm.

 

                        LIZZY

              I KNEW IT WAS HAPPENING!

 

Page Eighteen

 

1.  Lizzy tries, and miserably fails, to shove the entire cake into her mouth at once.  It gets all over her face and hands.

 

2.  Ember moves towards Lizzy slowly as she begins to tear.  Lizzy reaches angrily back into the snack box for another cake.

 

                        EMBER

              Lizzy…

 

 

                        LIZZY

              Mpfft?

 

3.  Ember touches Lizzy’s shoulders as Lizzy pulls a second cake out of the box.

 

                        EMBER

              Put the chocolate down…

 

                        LIZZY

              Mrop.

 

Page Nineteen

 

1.  Ember reaches towards the snack, which Lizzy struggles to keep away from her.

 

                        EMBER

              This won’t fix anything, Liz.

 

                        LIZZY

              Yef it wiw!

 

2.  Ember takes the cake away and grabs the box while Lizzy pouts like a five-year-old.  Ember stays calm as she speaks.

 

                        EMBER

              Now… what’s wrong?

 

3.  Lizzy swallows the cake (SFX: GLLULP~).  Ember puts the snacks away as she watches Lizzy.

 

4.  Lizzy props her chin on her hands with her elbows on the table.  She’s still pouting a bit.  Ember closes a cabinet door, shutting out the chocolate Miss Daisy treats.

 

                        LIZZY

              It’s bad out there, Ember, real bad.

 

                        EMBER

              Uh-huh.

 

Page Twenty

 

1.  Lizzy sweeps some crumbs away as she continues.  Ember leans against a wall behind her and watches.

 

                        LIZZY

              The natives, you know, the Pun’erii?  They’re sentencing humans for anything they can, Em!

 

2.  Lizzy turns to Ember, tears forming in her eyes.  Ember looks sympathetic and concerned.  She touches Lizzy’s shoulder again.

 

                        LIZZY

              Especially with that girl, that Jen-eye missing.  They’d do anything to get her home, Ember, anything!

 

3.  Lizzy is crying now.

 

                        LIZZY

              A-and if anything…

 

Page Twenty-One

 

1.  Lizzy turns away from Ember, who hugs her gently.  Lizzy throws her face into the table (SFX: SMAKK!).  Ember scrunches her face up in pain.

 

                        LIZZY

              If anything, us humans are only makin’ it worse!

 

2.  Ember pulls Lizzy towards her and into a tight hug.  She rubs Lizzy’s back with her human hand.  (SFX: SNIFFLE SNUFF SNIFF).

 

                        EMBER

              Shh, it’ll be okay, Liz.  It’s gonna be okay.

 

3.  Lizzy returns Ember’s embrace, still sobbing (SFX: SNUFFLE BLUBBER SNIFF).

 

Page Twenty-Two

 

1.  Evan walks down a road in a deteriorating shopping area.  It is now mid-afternoon, and the road is sparsely populated by humans.  Evan is carrying two blue fabric bags filled with food (include bread, strange vegetables, and a carton of fruit juice).  He is smiling and singing as he walks.

 

                        EVAN

              And I will never let ya faaall!  I’ll never let ya down, I sweeaar…!

 

2.  Evan nears his house, his smile bigger when he sees it.

 

                        EVAN

              Whenever you neeed mee, I praaah-mise…

 

Page Twenty-Three

 

1.  Evan opens the front door.

 

                        EVAN

              …I’ll bee theerrree!

 

2.  Evan peeks inside the door.  Je’anae turns to look at him as she sits on a couch.  She smiles brightly at him, almost laughing.

 

                        EVAN

              Hey!

 

                        JE’ANAE

              Evan!

 

3.  Evan puts down the bags and kicks the door shut (SFX: KU-KLUNK!).  Je’anae smiles at him.

 

                        JE’ANAE

              Did you get my peanut butter and versai roots?

 

                        EVAN

              Yeah.

 

4.  Evan pulls what looks like a green ginger root from one bag and looks at it in disgust.

 

                        EVAN

              I don’t know how you eat this stuff…

 

                        JE’ANAE (Voice Over)

              I usually don’t!

 

Page Twenty-Four

 

1.  Je’anae looks through one of the bags excitedly.  Evan watches her with a frown.

 

                        JE’ANAE

              I just, I feel like I need to eat one now.  Like, it just sounds really good.

 

2.  Je’anae stands up with a jar of peanut butter and takes the root from Evan as she continues.

 

                        JE’ANAE

              I don’t really like peanut butter, either.

 

Page Twenty-Five

 

1.  Evan follows Je’anae back to the couch.  She is twisting the lid off of the jar as she sits down.

 

                        EVAN

              You were sick last night.

 

                        JE’ANAE

              I must be better.

 

2.  Evan sits down as Je’anae dips the root in her peanut butter.

 

                        EVAN

              But you don’t normally eat this stuff?

 

                        JE’ANAE

              Nope!

 

3.  Je’anae nibbles the snack as Evan watches her, now looking quite worried.

 

                        EVAN

              Je’anae, it’s not, um…

 

4.  Je’anae turns to Evan in disbelief, still munching hungrily on the root.

 

                        EVAN

              …n-not a craving...

 

                        EVAN

              …is it?

 

Transition: End Issue #2…



© 2011 Brytt


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