A Table Set For Disaster

A Table Set For Disaster

A Poem by Dotty Thompson
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Two bodies spilled together
Like tonic and gin
On that spoony
Afternoon

But sure enough, the coffee
Went cold
As our table was only set
For disaster

You see we reached that fork
in the road
That happens some time
Around the 2 year mark
After dessert

We reached a fork...
You chose the knife
My plate was split in two
For I still longed for
The spoon

© 2018 Dotty Thompson


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This poem is definitely symbolic with double meaning with wonderful clever imagery in the form of familiar kitchen, house utensils such as fork, spoon, knife and plate here indicative of far more deeper ramifications.
Thus you cleverly and skilfully leave room for the readers' imagination. Which is what poetry is about when considering its diverse myriad arrays of soul expression.
'Two bodies spilled together
like tonic and gin
on that spoony
afternoon.'
'We reached a fork...
you chose the knife.
My plate was split in two
for I still longed for
the spoon.'

WELL DONE!


Posted 1 Year Ago


You grabbed me and puled me right in and I feel a sense of loss and separation, almost like I am the plate split in two! What a great idea using the simplicity of dinnerware to describe such complex feelings!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Easily to picture one self sitting by that table, love it when i so easily can find my soul entering into someone's art of writing (:

Posted 1 Year Ago


Hello, Dotty,
A warm, happy welcome to The Café! : )
Just thought I'd drop by to sample a taste off your buffet and introduce myself … Hi, I'm Richard!

How wonderful it is to meet a knowing poetess who understands the value of creative metaphor, and I'm all too familiar with your brand of meal, too … one could starve to death on that diet, eh?
With such excellent grammar and syntax, vivid imagery, ease of flow, spot-on line-breaks, and emotional tugs … it is pleasurably obvious this isn't your first Free Verse rodeo.

The "spoon" is one of my favorites, too! ; )
A big hug of thanks for this enjoyable smile … I'm so glad you joined! ⁓ Richard

Posted 1 Year Ago


YES, I am a long termer my self and stay way past the expiration date...my is more towards the 7 yr itch mark ...I guess I am just a slow learner or give to much time for them to process cause I am told too often that my non filter is at light speed. Such a shame though when your still holding the spoon lovingly in your hand and realized there is nothing left in the bowl and they have thrown in the napkin. connection.....

Posted 1 Year Ago


Love the metaphorical resilience in this piece... felt like I was sitting in at the table when I know I should have been minding my own business. Wonderful write!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Wow. Such powerful imagery here. That last verse was definitely my favourite.

Posted 2 Years Ago


A metaphor of a masterpiece! A truly enjoyable read! I find these pieces sometime suffer for meaning! However, your meaning is concise and well put together! Great work here, Dotty!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Dotty Thompson

2 Years Ago

Thanks for the positive words John, and thanks for stopping by
A crossroad in the relationship. It's a decision for everyone to make. take the same road together or go separate ways. Sometimes taking the road together you still get lost and when you go your separate ways you somehow manage to find yourself back together.life is complicated

Posted 2 Years Ago


Dotty Thompson

2 Years Ago

Well said, KC. Thanks for reading and sharing some insight
Great description of relationships. That point is inevitable when you have to decide to move forward or to move on. Nice write!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Dotty Thompson

2 Years Ago

Thanks for dropping by, Tony.

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