Firefly

Why am I
Trapped alone in a darkened world
Left to feel
But never know relief from pain

Why do I
Embrace a life so full of sadness
While the light
Dances just beyond my grasp

When did I
Become unworthy of a friend
Someone to care
No matter how low I may be

And how can I
Convince myself that I should live
When all I see
Is everything that that's wrong with me

I am drowning
In a world where I don't belong
Where only sorrow
Comes to soothe the open wounds

A firefly
Trapped in this jar of my existence
I watched you smile
And leave me here to fade away

Author's Note

just thoughts.

Reviews

[SR Urie]

Hey Cattie,
Interesting sentiments of inprisonment and betrayal, of abandonment. As always your poetry hits a mark beyond imagination making it so good, and so unique.
Good job, my dear! BZ

Sorry I've been a little preoccupied with my studies. School's finally back in session!
S

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Man...this was just amazing.

Class is in session. Some people have their moments..
Others are just born to do it. I felt moved by your work.

You made me think about how we look at the beautiful
firefly and trap it. We admire its beauty, but we have no
idea how hurt it is..or how we kill it with our own selfishness..
not knowing that it died from a broken heart. It knowing that
everything it sees will never be touched again.

[Michael X]

Now this is a powerful poem, the concept is soft yet striking, i enjoy the
way you leave the specific meaning open to indivisual interpretation because
it allows a sense of mystery to play naturally through the void, and that being
the feeling of eternal heartbreak represented partly in each stanza much like

puzzle pieces, your flow of meaning links together nicely, with detailed
transitions- makes the reader stop and think about what is said in this
perspective theatrically dramatized as only a poet can draw emphasis.
which really brings the meaning to life, the ending encapsulates the eternal

feeling of being shut out forever, almost as if losing contact with someone
very close but with a sense of deep sorrow and conviction, as if something
you could've said or could have done would resolve to make the situation
better, this poem is excellent because its also easily relatable, awsome job.

[emily joe]

I love this. Excellent work.

[Norma M Sutton]

This sums it up nicely.

A firefly
Trapped in this jar of my existence
I watched you smile
And leave me here to fade away

[Haifa]

Great poem, I like it.

[Miss Coral]

This was.. I can't decide what to say.
I considered great. I considered awful.
This was touching, and depressing, and wonderful all at the same time. It's quite simply written, but the last stanza just.. meant something.
Which doesn't happen often in writing.
I can't properly describe it. Not as I should be able to.
But take it as a good thing.

Very nicely done.

-Coral-