When I Dream Of You

When I Dream Of You

A Poem by A.T.B.

 

I keep your voice loitering
in my mind like I keep chocolate
leisurely melting in my mouth. 
I hung on to you the way
a summer’s day holds on to sunlight
until the sun
coyly withdraws behind the horizon
in a fiery, orange shroud.
That’s why the sun, which seems
trounced by the darkness of night,
brazenly surges back into the morning,
the day's waiting embrace.
When I close my eyes, I could feel
the warmth of your body
by my side;
your head gently reposes
on my shoulder; your arms wrapped around
my chest
and your fingers
touching my face. In my dreams,
you gracefully float like a water Lily
sailing down the dawdling stream
of my consciousness.
Your brows accentuate your eyes like two
crescents in a starless sky.
You are magnificent. 

© 2008 A.T.B.


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aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Posted 8 Years Ago


this is wonderful, a great way to start my day

Posted 10 Years Ago


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LJW
Very hot in a cool kind of way.

Again, your last line is stunning.

Posted 11 Years Ago


It is revolvinly satisfying, a very moving piece you have here.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this poem alot. very nice. calming yet full of emotion and love!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a calming piece. Really made me sit back and stare at the screen for a moment afterwards just to take it all in. If this were music, I think it would be classical. The tone that you used in this is so subtle.

You always know the right metaphors to use to describe your emotions. This really gives the reader an insight on what you have seen. When I got to:

In my dreams, you gracefully float like a water Lily sailing down the dawdling stream of my consciousness.

I immediately thought this was heavenly. I can hear it, see it, and believe in it. This was beauty.

Your brows accentuate your eyes like two
crescents in a starless sky.

Speechless........

Love!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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