The Job

just a bit of anger...

Just a job.

right.

 

my sweat, bllod, toiling

in this heat of anger

and biting back all the curses

that little children should not hear

 

and you,

the boss, the

leader supreme...

 

you see nothing because

I,

am beyond you

untouchable and quietly

leaning into the wind.

Author's Note

the basics - flow, detail, etc.

Reviews

[Rain]

I knew what the poem was about, because you told me. You had some cool lines in it. You may have went into more detail, but other wise a good description of your frustration. Rain..

[STurner]

Hell yeah!! We must have shared bosses at one time or another. Your flow is good. Your intent seems real, raw and to the point. Go get 'em.

[Jessica]

1. stanza 2, line one... do you mean "blood"? You have "bllod".
2. The flow is a little choppy. I'm not sure if this is what you intended, but, it didn't really work for me.
3. There's a lack of details here. I'm not even sure that I even know what you're talking about.
4. I think that you might want to consider re-writing this...making it longer and increasing the detail, etc. in it. This is okay, but I know that you have the ability to make it amazing. Just give it a shot, maybe it won't work out, but you'll never know unless you try it out.