wherein biology foils natureboy

wherein biology foils natureboy

A Poem by Camawin

This year I swam in the river in mid-may,
ashley was there,
sensibly on the bank,
thecurrent flushed with runoff
where I swam in snowflakes,
future and past,
and drip dried shivering in the sun.
 
We kissed and I pretended I was
a cold blooded lizard and she was
suncharged sandstone.
we looked for morels
and in the alder thickets
I felt spiderweb's
breaking on my bare chest.
 
An intact webb foretells solitude,
induces thoughts of its maker
then congratulates you
for being there first
by sticking in your hair.
 
The new grass looked inviting
and we would have made love
and looked for spiders
but ashley is light skinned,
serious and shy under the sun,
and I forgot the condoms anyway.

© 2009 Camawin


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Wonderful, man. Your attention to detail and the way your writing bounces from on subject to another but still keeps the main point in the forefront is astounding. The only thing I would change is a minor thing : You forgot to put a space between "the current" in line four. Other than that, strong, a beautiful, quick, humorous story that is flirting with pure brilliance. Dug it a lot in other words. Great title, too.

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boy, you've got the Hedra Helix stamp of approval. . . that goes a long way in this neck of the woods. It's gorgeous and bright and philosophical. Seems to me the river is an old friend. Figures prominently in your work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wonderful, man. Your attention to detail and the way your writing bounces from on subject to another but still keeps the main point in the forefront is astounding. The only thing I would change is a minor thing : You forgot to put a space between "the current" in line four. Other than that, strong, a beautiful, quick, humorous story that is flirting with pure brilliance. Dug it a lot in other words. Great title, too.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

that's frikking gorgeous.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Camawin
Camawin

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