Lessons Learned

Lessons Learned Treasure them! If you don't, you will not learn... Written April, 2003 (4 years ago)

Our lives have had great mountains and hills

We've taken our share of spills and thrills

God's given US little lives to share

To hold, to love and always to care

To give them rules - watch them break them

To give them help - let them take it

To teach them patience, although we have none

To make examples of our mistakes, fun

To love, to care, to give and dare

To look into their innocent eyes

To watch and learn from them, surprise!

Our goal is to give

The best life we can live

And when we grow old

And when they get bold

We can sit back with wonder and tears

How our lives have affected theirs

How the love we gave them, shows

In everyway, as their own kids grow

Author's Note

This is an amature writers words in communicating to her companion (at the time) about the importance she felt in the lives they held...
Bear in mind - if you would please - this is prior to learning a bit more of writing styles and utilization of words. I now know... this was an awesome step (lesson learned, if you would) in developing as a writer.

Thank you for your patience and honesty.

Reviews

[Sarah W. French]

This is a good poem. It has so many levels and I can't wait to read more poems written by you.

[Ahmad Alhour]

I simply state with utmost honesty I can give:
It is lovely...

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

its a great poem, of love and growth, ---mishy, :)

[Krishna]

It's really special, you can tell you have your heart in the right place and that comes through, I'm not sure what more you would want?

[James Horsley]

A tad bit choppy at some points, but an excellent message. I think everyone has that one piece that really gets them on the way in writing; if this is yours then there's absolutely no shame there.

[Dagger Jones]

I think its fine the way it is, the font suits coz its green and after all that is the color of freshness and growth, which is what I got out of this. It has depth of honesty which I seem to adhere too. I might add as some others already have, apologize for nothing.

[jmt8921]

Good! But I agree about the font making it kind of hard to read. Also, I think this line
"To teach them patience, although we have none
To make examples of our mistakes, fun " kind of throws off the rhythm because fun is all by itself, and it kind of turns it into a stop. I'd suggest changing the line up a few different ways and see if there's a version of it you like better, maybe the second part could be "To make examples of our mistakes for fun" or "To make examples of our mistakes, it's all in fun".

[JC Fox]

I liked this poem the color of the font kind of hurt my eyes though, that is the only complaint I have

[Ron Reardon]

I think this is awesome! It has depth, fantasy, and kept me entertained as well. Yes, if this was a early step, it was a very good one!

[poetsblade]

never pre apologize for your writing...good emotional content....you can see growth in your writing