drunken haze

drunken haze

A Poem by capn_bribri

a drunken haze
 will only bring you happiness for a moment
a sober life
will leave you lonely
so make that drunken haze a drunken life
and it will bury that lonelyness   

© 2010 capn_bribri


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Great work! the words go together good

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like it a lot. It flows nicely. The structure doesn't look like it would.
But, when you read it, it has a nice rhythm. I think its funny in an ironic
kind of way. A free spirit having the secret of life. I can imagine a really
uptight person that is an emotional wreck receiving this advice. lol.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Ohhhhhhhh, how I can relate to this point! Very nice.

[ Side note: Is there an extra "a" in the fifth line? ;] ]

Posted 14 Years Ago


I liked it for the most part, but it didn't really seem to flow. Not trying to be a b***h or anything. Nice job otherwise!
~Blessed Be~


Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on February 5, 2010
Last Updated on February 8, 2010

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capn_bribri
capn_bribri

kent, WA



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Im 17 and when im not shy im really hyper . I have 7 peircings my snake bites , tongue , both sides of my nose and gauges (: I live in washington and no not washington DC just plain old washington whe.. more..

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