I am not well

I am not well

A Chapter by captain
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*just a thought*

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The door is broken, so am I…

The bread is not in good shape, so am I…

The water is dirty, so am I…

You see emotionally I am not well…



© 2013 captain


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I'm wondering if this would be more unified if you 'som am I...' on the first two lines to 'neither am I...' just a thought. The three chapters spell out someone who has a very low opinion of himself. This sort of thing is self-perpetuating. Take it from someone who was there... my self image made my early life miserable.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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nicely written poem. good work here.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm wondering if this would be more unified if you 'som am I...' on the first two lines to 'neither am I...' just a thought. The three chapters spell out someone who has a very low opinion of himself. This sort of thing is self-perpetuating. Take it from someone who was there... my self image made my early life miserable.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Oh Captain my Captain...such sad dreary thoughts running though the mind when we are blue..... but the door will be repaired, and the bread will rise...a filter will take care of that water..and the burdens will lift..in time
a piece we all can relate to !

Posted 7 Years Ago


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just a thought-no way to describe this feeling
saturated with need and sadness hope life sparks you again
thank you for sharing truly

Posted 7 Years Ago


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captain

7 Years Ago

Thank you much Miss Holly. I truly am hopeful to that sparks again. It's hard being blue all the tim.. read more
So sad and lovely...We missed you Captain...

Posted 7 Years Ago


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captain

7 Years Ago

thanks, Sami. You are a friend indeed, you have been missed too.
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

Indeed. My pleasure...:)
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Pax
so sad captain ~ i feel you here, your emotions here is relate-able ~

Posted 7 Years Ago


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captain

7 Years Ago

Pax, thank you very much. I'm feel like I am not alone.
Before, when I'm not feeling well, emotionally or physically, I just remember what "The 3 Idiots" said: "All is Well".

But today, the feeling is mutual. You see, emotionally I am not well, too. (:

Posted 7 Years Ago


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captain

7 Years Ago

all is well, i like that. It gives a sense of uplifting feeling. Thank you very much miss.
the simple things in life don't excite me...life is drab...

i am broken...nothing feels the same, looks the same , is the same.

there will be a replenishing...there will...

Posted 7 Years Ago


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captain

7 Years Ago

I am hoping. Thank you Sir.
simple, sad, and relate-able...very nice

Posted 7 Years Ago


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captain

7 Years Ago

thank very much Serenus, its very nice to hear that you can relate to it.
Sirius King

7 Years Ago

very much so...your welcome

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