Winter Agony

On this cold winter night,
The glowing white snow creeping through the door;
Infinite snowflakes grappling against the windowpane,
Silent and soft.

In this cabin, beside the warm fireplace I reside,
Flames sitting on these maple hardwoods.
I sip from a cup of coffee.
To let go of this numbness inside.

I catch a glimpse of the coldness departing
As the aroma of my luscious coffee surrounds.
A moment, it thaws my frozen heart
As I feel the heat entangle around.

I miss the burst of buds.
How I want these coneflowers bloom purple petals afresh.
The trees that were once sturdy and tall,
Now without leaves to cover its limbs.

As minutes tick by,
Snow drifts further beyond the covered plain.
If I wait a little more,
Will this lessen my joint pain?

Near these iced streams, roots of upturned trees,
Nests a winter wren.
In this smooth woolen blanket, I'll hibernate,
Until spring decides to come again.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

Welcome to the Cafe' som! title and poem are strong fits says i! and I agree with others that the imaging is vivid ... form sways between some kind of order and a freer style ... same with rhyming ... i love your closing ... the contrast with all the cold; both literal and/or heart and/or spiritual with that little wren...nesting in an uprooted tree ... and woolen blankets is wonderful says i ... we can never let go of our hope .. even is it is the thinnest of strings ;) see you around som!
E.

[som]

Thank you very much for welcoming me and for that wonderful review! There is indeed a hope in every problem like there is a spring in every winter.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

This is a very good write, very descriptive.

[som]

Thank you!!

[barleygirl]

You are a top-notch poet! In my last review of your book=fridge poem, I said don't be afraid to keep going . . . in this poem, that's exactly what you did! I love how this meanders. I don't feel a strong theme as I read, but rather, the message is revealing as a surprise, as if the reader is discovering how the narrator feels, bit by bit. I love how you weave nature observations & inner feelings. The first stanza could be pumped up a teensy bit if you stretched for more vivid words instead of "cold" and "white" -- these are pretty typical descriptions of winter & most of the time, your writing is NOT typical, it's bright & refreshing. But there are a few words that come out "blah!" here & there. These could be played with (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the description. The changes of seasons. A blessing and needed. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I did enjoy.
Coyote

[som]

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem! Thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome.

[The Daisy]

Beautiful use of imagery for an agonizing poem!

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful imagery you have conveyed here in your lines. Love that feeling of comfort from the coffee and keeping out of the cold. I felt the heat of the fire, nice.

Chris

[som]

Thank you so much for the review! Much appreciated.

[Rye]

I really enjoyed this write, wonderful imagery as well. nicely done

[som]

Thank you! I'm greatful you enjoyed it.