Hitting The Right Note

Hitting The Right Note

A Poem by Chris Shaw

May I talk about my daughter,
sing a song of harmony?
Pack away the unwise choices
yet alone bad company.

And the compass lost in transit,
time to play a melody.

Soothe and smooth those stubborn creases,
fix the torn and ragged seams,
take a needle, thread some cotton,
mend those fractured long lost dreams.

When we shared our thoughts at breakfast,
we became a symphony.

© 2018 Chris Shaw


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this is one o them's got everything .. insight, love, self awareness, confidence, maturity and a kind of unconditional protectiveness for one's own flesh and blood that is rare to find outside of such relationships .. wish I'd found it sooner :)


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Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Aw, thanks Neville for picking this one. That was such a lovely morning spent with Cath, I just had .. read more



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this is one o them's got everything .. insight, love, self awareness, confidence, maturity and a kind of unconditional protectiveness for one's own flesh and blood that is rare to find outside of such relationships .. wish I'd found it sooner :)


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Aw, thanks Neville for picking this one. That was such a lovely morning spent with Cath, I just had .. read more
'Hitting The Right note
Chris Shaw,
To take in another's experience and see "I am not alone." Times of harmony dwelt upon are what can empower the times which ring discordant. To think of conversations one on one give reason to hope for more to come. Bless you in you own family.
Kathy

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Dear Kathy, many thanks for giving this older poem an airing. I really appreciate you taking the tim.. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

1 Year Ago

You are welcome Chris.
It is a privilege to be able to freely discuss and write. We are bless.. read more
sharing thoughts either at breakfast or on dinner time is always something that keeps people reunited and together.. i understand, it's only a few moments of sharing, but this moment is all what one needs to feel the peace.. and saddest part is, it doesn't remain the same for long; chooses to walk on by w/ time. alone.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

3 Years Ago

Thank you Wordsmith for choosing another old poem to give an airing. I appreciate your visit.
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What a loving, sincere, yet utterly logical way of looking at a relationship with little children/little people whose lives you'll watch and be part of .. precious as can be. And that through all the stages: I couldnt have children, have ten godchildren, had my late sisters daughter live with me from nearly eighten til just past twenty three. We went throug all sorts together, terrible for her but, we managed, She's not just my niece but one of my VERY BEST FRIENDS. Learned how it is to love, to care, to count self more than lucky because of her. We learn from young people from birth to whenever, what is it to be unique, how to live and care, do the best we can. Thank you for posting this, perhaps i've no right to contribute.. but your post is so special, Christine. xx

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

5 Years Ago

Special place Brisham, happy holidays when young and respectable! IYour post really touched me, the.. read more
Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

I have all three of my grandchildren living with me Em, and have done for the last 16 years. My poet.. read more
emmajoy

5 Years Ago

Feel free to share if ever you want. In spite of my blather, am quite a good friend. (YOU) Feel fr.. read more
This review I type to you is idiototic. But I like this that you have written. It made me think and ponder.
good job.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Your comments are not idiotic. They are valued and I appreciate the time you have taken to both read.. read more
Jack O

5 Years Ago

You will ruin my self image if you do not agree with what I have written. Gosh! : ) lol
Love this Chris. Yes, we have to communicate anyway we can with our children. “Whatever Works!” Is my motto. Soothe them, mend them, teach them, wipe their tears-and of course sing to and with them as you describe so tunefully here. It is a melody itself with lovely form, flow, rhythm. Reminds me of when my three grandsons (twins of 9 and brother 7) are around the breakfast table chittering and chattering- that’s more like Chipmunk Serenade though. :)))

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

You are so right Annette, we have to find ways to communicate with our children. They are all differ.. read more
That's good that you played in harmony and got rid of all the wrong notes :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Was a wonderful feeling Stella. Well worth writing about. Thank you
Stella Armour

5 Years Ago

you expressed it beautifully Chris..
Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Glad you thought so Stella
We're all connected in some way, I love how you talk about real world stuff via artistic form and make it seem so effortless and magical. You cure my tone-deaf life and add melody to it with your words. It proves that via conversation every bridge can be mended and no journey has to be walked alone. xoxo Kee.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Much of my poetry is about day to day stuff Kee. I am thrilled that it is of benefit to you. I also .. read more
Thank you settle. Your response very much appreciated.

Chris

Posted 5 Years Ago


the bond between the mother and child will never be broken

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Chris Shaw
Chris Shaw

Berkshire, United Kingdom



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