Absent Stars

And who has swept the stars away

not one remains in sight?

Too eager with their bristle brush

they've cleaned the sky at night.

So all those clustered gems I love

which give me peace of mind,

are huddled in an unknown place

that torchlight can not find.

A canvas stretches end to end

devoid of silver light.

The moon has left, those sparklers gone

will no one hear my plight?

If I should ask or make a wish

or plead for compromise,

will someone spare two tiny stars

and place them in my eyes?

Reviews

[Soren]

Taken literally, I too miss the stars. I remember when young going to the mountains with no outside light and seeing so many stars, now all gone due to light pollution. But figuratively, I feel that the present has taken the stars from our eyes with its form of light pollution. Nicely done Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Soren. I appreciate the thoughts you have shared here. All the best.

Chris

[augustus]

Do you mind if I elbow my way in past all these reviewers to add my five penny worth? Your poetry is a delight and I love to read it.

[Chris Shaw]

Augustus, I am delighted to have you elbow your way in. Thank you so much for reading my poetry and for the encouragement to continue writing.

Chris

[augustus]

Without doubt you must continue writing Chris. Like me, once you start you can't stop!

[Davidgeo]

Lovely. And rooted in astrophysical truths. Because every single thing in the observable universe is in motion, in the extremely distant future every single planet, star, moon, etc.. will be so far away from each other that not even light is fast enough to close the distance. Our night sky will be forever completely devoid of starlight and we really will be alone in a universe about to die from what is called a "heat death". Of course, this is literally many many trillions of years away (googlplex) so nothing we know of today will be around to see it happen. Even the Milky Way galaxy would have collided into many others forming something completely different by then... probably even certain physical laws of the universe will have changed by then.

[Chris Shaw]

David, I just write the poem and you can feed back with wonderful and intelligent conversation. I really thank you for that and making me feel that my poetry isn't always lightweight. Many thanks for your visit.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

Not everyone knows what they know. Based on what I've read from you over our time here I would be willing to wager that If you were to take some math and physics classes you'd surprise yourself with how much you already knew but just hadn't yet described out loud. Your poetry isn't lightweight... even if you aren't aware of it yet, it's really not.

[Sarah K Cass]

How beautiful, Chris. Right up my street, that one. Quite short but beautifully rhythmic and rhyming.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Amber. Just brought this one out for an airing. I do that every now and again with my older writes. Thanks for your visit. Have a great day.

Chris

[Jon Roggie]

Living under a night sky dimmed by city lights,
I can feel your longing.
Time away gives a chance to see the beauty,
and the memory of the stars wait hiding behind your eyes.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jon. There is something truly mesmerising in a starlit sky. Hope all is OK with you.

Chris

[Flowers of Eternity]

I really love this Chris! Love the rhythm and message of the poem as well!
You really have a knack for writing!

[Chris Shaw]

Flowers of Eternity, and you have the knack of making me feel good about my poetry. Thank you so much.

Chris

[Flowers of Eternity]

Your welcome!
Thank you for the compliment as well!
Appreciated it!

[Chris Shaw]

:)).….............

[LazerRays]

So beautiful. :) the stars are beautiful aren't they? They shine brighter tonight after reading this poem

[Chris Shaw]

What a beautiful response. You have put a smile on my face. Thank you Sarah.

Chris

[LazerRays]

anytime chris :D

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

oooh how could i have missed this poem
this is truly beautiful
its erethral almost spiritual and love it to bits
well done
10 stars to you please excuse the pun :) (couldnt resist) lol

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Julie. Sorry for the belated appreciation.

Chris

[Mark]

The phrasing flows with rhythm and rhymes nicely. You might even say it twinkles! I enjoyed this!

Mark

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Mark. Thanks for checking this one out. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Lorry]

Snap! I was just thinking along similar lines last night, except a little further north it looked like someone stole the sky and replaced it with a very low hanging,, black and angry supercloud, that was just waiting to burst.
Was it only august it was still light at 10pm? Its mot fair. No twinkles to watch, not even Mr Moon could barge his way through.:)
Roll on spring. :)
Beautifully written Chris, it sounded to me your words were spoken in a soft, pleading sigh.

Sigh :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Lorry. I was of course talking to myself and ever so quietly. Unfortunately in my household I am the only poetry lover and I believe they think I'm eccentric at best, nutty at worst. (lol)

Chris

[Lorry]

I used to describe myself in the about me section, as "as nutty as an explosion in a snickers factory." :)

[Chris Shaw]

Did you mention snickers? Well you would 't leave a snicker bar in my sight if you had any sense. I have to be rationed (lol)

[Lorry]

maybe thats where the nutty part comes from. Hey, maybe thats the secret of poetry, all poets eat snickers. Except the ones that we pretend have left they had nut allergies :)

[Chris Shaw]

I think you are on to something :))

[Lorry]

Which wood technically make snickers.poets ambrosia. Maybe I should buy some shares :)

[Fran Marie]

It's a bit sad to look up and see a starless night sky..but hopefully you'll find those stars again..your rhyme and rhythm is spot on ..nice work

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Fran Marie. They'll come out again when they are ready :)

Chris