"No more", they said, "No more"

"No more", they said, "No more"

A Poem by Christine Anne Shaw
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@ 1930, and true. My Nan's father. She could barely bring herself to utter his name.

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Last breath he took upon a bench,
the stench of liquor on his lips.
A selfish drunk who could not see
the harm inflicted painfully
on those he left dirt poor.

So cold the corpse at dawn in death.
Much colder still the ice-skimmed pond,
and frozen stiff the hearts of those
that cursed the way of life he chose.
"No more", they said. "No more".

© 2018 Christine Anne Shaw


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This is going to be another one of my personal favourite Christine Anne Shaw creations... a perfectly penned poem, without a shadow of a doubt.. both a somber and a sobering subject.. a sad relief or a sad release maybe... I bet there are many families who have been similarly affected.. I know mine has in the past...Morning our Chris... :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

7 Months Ago

No.. I concede defeat.. the best man won.. :)
Neville Pettitt

7 Months Ago

we crossed in the ether mate.. ether that or summats going on...
Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

You two, both as lovable as each other :))



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I think liquor is a disease and it makes its victim selfish all the way till their liver can't take it anymore, they die a selfish death, some even leave debts save for the pain of their deaths and the pain their loved ones had to endure with each glass of liquor they took, numerous rehab visits, irresponsibility and a lot more that am sure you know of, I wish they just knew better!!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

It is an illness Cassie. They can't help themselves. This was about my great grandfather James. His .. read more
Chris, this is simply brilliant. While it can be painful to write of family issues, it can also be cathartic for those involved. Too many families bury their experiences instead of sharing them … the hurt lingers and affects the relationship.
That being said, your second verse is very powerful and wonderfully penned. The first two lines reading like ones written by one of the romantics.
A good write.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

Many thanks Ted for your encouraging review. It doesn't come easy writing about my own. Maybe it jus.. read more
Ted Kniffen

7 Months Ago

You're right, Chris, it is never easy. The fear is in offending someone you care about by revealing .. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

Many thank yous Ted. Good wishes gratefully received. All the very best to you and yours for 2019read more
addiction takes many forms and alcoholism is very near top if not the top. very painful to read which means gold as you hit the notes. very effective.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

Thank you duck. Pleased it hit the bull's eye. It is a painful subject all round.

Chr.. read more
i am glad you gave the note about the time period ..and story of your Great Grand Father if i am reading that correctly ... the "ice-skimmed pond" is brilliant says i! i had to stop and consider it ..how cold...dangerous and dark under that thin veil ...still fluid ... incredible ma'am! then contrasting it with hard frozen hearts smacks me nerve ending numb ... what a time our forefathers (and mothers) went through ... many suicides ... slow deaths from drink ... poverty and stressed health ... poignant poem Chris ... i would like to see a couple more verses even ... but it is fantastic as is what ever you do ;) Happy New Year

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

Happy New Year to you too Mr E. I hope it brings you much happiness. This poem is very dark because .. read more
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

oh ...i am so glad you wrote this and posted .. its important and very worthwhile in my opinion .. b.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

You are most kind. I do not despise him in the same way my Nan did. I guess I am a bit more forgivin.. read more
I lost many to alcohol. My father rotten his stomach with rum. In 1976, many of the soldiers from the Vietnam war. Drank to forget. Many reason to seek the slow death. Powerful words on a hard subject. I drank heavy till I met my wife. I learn life was more than me. Thank you Chris for sharing the powerful and worthwhile poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Chris.. In the USA. Most of the homeless. Veterans.
Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

We have same here Coyote. It is a scandal that veterans are left homeless. They give their all and i.. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

I agree. We mess our youth-up and leave them to heal themselves. WW2 was the worst. J.D Salinger was.. read more
Even I've lost my loved one just because his drinking habits.
This is great poem I have read today.
Thanks for sharing 😊 😊 😊


Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

Many thanks Rahul. I am sorry for your loss. Alcoholism, is a dreadful disease that effects many. It.. read more
Rahul Bakolia

7 Months Ago

Yes you right.
Nice write so dark and vivid like a Stephen King novel. Such imagery of hardship and cruelty shines through the images.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

8 Months Ago

Many thanks Andrew for your response. Merry Christmas to you and yours.

Chris
Drinking can be a family buster & you've conveyed the buried hostilities so palpably. One of my older brothers was a mean drunk & since I was the baby, he scared me. You use chilling imagery - literally! - and it's perfect for this family freeze-out (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

8 Months Ago

Oh yes Margie, family freeze out indeed. Thank you for your review. I think most families have a rel.. read more
This is a visual, stark and graphic, that one can never forget dear Chris. Frozen corpse and frozen hearts. You perfectly convey the suffering of an alcoholic and his family. Too common both then and now. He repetition of “No more” is heart-wrenching as it emphasizes the ravages of alcohol abuse on even a loving family. I’ve experienced it my family too. Yes, “A selfish drunk” is a force of destruction. Great write my friend.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

8 Months Ago

Very many thanks for your thoughtful and understanding review Annette. Always good to see you.
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A very meaningful poem. It seems like the person is reflecting back on the past as an alcholic and wants to stop.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

8 Months Ago

Thank you for your visit JungLee. Your comments appreciated.

Chris

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Christine Anne Shaw

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Have been at Writerscafe for a year now, so pleased I made the change to posting my work here. Have loved reading poetry all my life, but never wrote my first poem until I hit 40. I wish now that I.. more..

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