Clocking Off

More river musings, and yes this has happened at lock gates :)

See the marbled waters surging

through the sluice gates, open wide.

Feel the bows and sterns of cruisers

rising roughly side by side,

as the Keeper of the lock gates

keeps his eyes upon the clock.

Time for lunch his belly tells him,

off he goes he's clocking off.

"Man the gates yourselves", he's saying,

"lunch is lunch and I'm not staying".

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

sometimes I wish you would take a picture of your portraits not that your portraits aren't pictures but i would like to see some of these scenes here we have giant locks with these 20 foot doors i"m not sure what sort of contraption sluice gates are but im curious now:) love the ending made me chuckle!

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Bunny, I have never posted images, mainly because I want the words to be read and for pictures to form in the readers head :)) Pleased the ending gave you a chuckle. Happy Sunday.

Chris

[andrew mitchell]

We are all consumed and driven by desires especially hunger!

[Chris Shaw]

How true Andrew. Many types of hunger :) Thanks for your visit. Most appreciated.

Chris

[barleygirl]

I am amazed at how you caught so much dynamic action in such a little poem! Great sequence of events, filled with human interest, driving home your point . . . humans are the monkeywrench in every operation! *wink! wink!* I read your back-and-forth with Robert (Bunny) & I am with you . . . I don't like to post a bunch of auxilliary stuff on my pages becuz I want the words to do all the work (hopefully!) Your words always do the heavy lifting! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Margie. Thanks for checking this one out. Not everyone agrees with me about posting images with my words, but pleased you understand my reasons. It's all in the words for me, but happy for other to post images with theirs.

Chris

[augustus]

We've all got to eat sometime!

[Chris Shaw]

True enough Augustus, but a delay of five minutes :)) Happy Sunday and thanks for your visit.

Chris

[Renée]

Oh My! That would be a predicament lol
Not sure about sluice gates, but I found locks fascinating, enjoyed your visual that sparked memories, and a chuckle!

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased to be able to give you memories and a chuckle. That's a result for me. Thank you.
read morePleased to be able to give you memories and a chuckle. That's a result for me. Thank you.

Chris

[Renée]

A pleasure (:

[B]

When hunger over takes people
Everything dissipates out of sight
The ideas once holding value soon mutate
The gates meant to be guarded - open wide
this is what i saw, i have quite the imagination

Cool Write!

[Chris Shaw]

You do have an imagination. Thank you for your valued visit.

Chris

[Vin]

wow! power to you

Vin ( https://vinajith.blogspot.com/ )

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for your visit vin. Appreciated.

Chris

[Carol Cashes]

I laughed out loud...and woke up one dog, who accidently touched the remote and changed the channel, which by complete happenstance stopped on a movie I had been waiting to see, which in turn, prompted me to make myself yet another g******n root beer float, which upon its complete consumption forced me to exchange my jeans for a roomy nightgown, which killed my husband's recently rediscovered desire....well, the potential chain of events after a line like "...lunch is lunch and I'm not staying." is just not to be believed.

[Chris Shaw]

Now you've got me laughing with this chain of events my poem set off. Pleased to give you some humour, it's in short supply these days. So pleased to read your review. All good wishes Carol.

Chris

[Fairy Khan]

You made me chuckle. The final lines are so cute and funny. Use of simple words is also whatI like the most in this one. Keep up the good work.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased to give you that chuckle Fairy, that was the intention. Thank you for your visit.
read morePleased to give you that chuckle Fairy, that was the intention. Thank you for your visit.

Chris

[David Klay]

This reminds me of a story my Father use to tell me. Has that "in the old days" feel to it. Well written and a very enjoyable read.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks David for your visit. Your thoughts appreciated.

Chris

[David Klay]

My pleasure :)

[Wondering Mind]

Your use of the capital K for the Keeper is interesting..does He take lunch breaks too?

[Chris Shaw]

What a very interesting thought. You made me smile and ponder. Thank you.

Chris