Young Pretenders

Young Pretenders

A Poem by Christine Anne Shaw
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(found in an old notebook of mine, swans are very territorial in the mating season)

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As swirling veils of winter mists
are softly kissed by half-baked sun,
a lovestruck swan in courting mood
checks out his rivals one by one.

Into his path newcomers stray,
too close by far throughout the morn,
hostile aggression he displays,
demeanour set, full feathered white
sharp focused, ready neck set low,
at speed he glides prepared to fight.

All young pretenders freeze in fear,
a battleship approaches there,
no hesitation on their part
as threats abound, their actions smart.
They don't perchance a second glance,
fast turn direction, sail away.

© 2019 Christine Anne Shaw


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That's some well worded flow this morning. It was interesting to imagine this playing out with swans, and then people. You could see this in an amusing and charming way or a more, aggressive, natural animalistic way. It works both ways but, I prefer the charming take.

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Thank you David. What I saw was pure aggression in nature. However human nature often mirrors what .. read more



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''Young Pretenders'
Christine Anne Shaw,
To consider the Swan which is lovely, graceful and pure white as a a wild bird of aggression and instinct is fascinating. For they are not a creature domesticated hybridized by man such as pet dogs. Even in old classical paintings they are seen as food for humans having been hunted. I saw a swan recently pulling seaweed up from the bottom of a shallow bay area. It was so enjoyable to watch.
Cool write!
Kathy

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Dear Kathy, when you see swans so majestic and graceful, it is difficult to comprehend their aggress.. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

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Christine
Yes, I see your point. My goodness what a stark difference between how they are vie.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Yes Kathy, they can be very aggressive, particularly if they feel their mate or cygnets are being th.. read more
I really enjoyed this Chris. The topic was so interesting - not something you come across often. I think its very clever how you embody the character of the swan and give them so much personality in such natural flow. I love the rhythm to this. Best, Laura.

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you Laura Kate. Certainly the behaviour of swans can be interesting if you look at them long e.. read more
The imagery is beautiful.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for your review. Your visit appreciated.

Chris

there is both beauty and danger here in this well poemed poem my friend..

Neville

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Christine Anne Shaw

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you Neville. Yes a beauty to behold, but never to forget how dangerous a swan can be if it fee.. read more
I had a swan pond near my old house - one of my favourite haunts. This took me right back there watching them fight over the bread crumbs i brought them
Nice write christine

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Christine Anne Shaw

4 Weeks Ago

Many thanks for your visit. Pleased you called on my page. Pleased I took you on a nostalgia trip.read more
Awesome love the rhyming beautiful thanks 🙏

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Christine Anne Shaw

4 Weeks Ago

Many thanks for your review Julie. Much appreciated.

Chris
Wow, amazing. As a beginner, as can be seen, by my poem Revenge, i must say this 10 levels above my work. Hopefully, my skill will grow to this level someday, and maybe more. I don't wish to bother you, but when you have free time could you review my poem ?

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Christine Anne Shaw

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you Fairytale I appreciate your visit and thoughts.

Chris
Nice work Chris! very evocative.
T

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Christine Anne Shaw

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for your visit Tom. Most appreciated.

Chris
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Ver
I enjoyed this poem for it's visuals and I learned something new about swans!

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Pleased you enjoyed the read Ver and I thank you for your visit.

Chris

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Nature is beautiful and dangerous, and worthy of respect in both regards. Well said, Chris.

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much for your visit. Good to see you back on the board.

Chris

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Christine Anne Shaw
Christine Anne Shaw

Berkshire, United Kingdom



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Have been at Writerscafe for a year now, so pleased I made the change to posting my work here. Have loved reading poetry all my life, but never wrote my first poem until I hit 40. I wish now that I.. more..

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