After The Eclipse

After The Eclipse

A Poem by Christine Anne Shaw
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one from the archives

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As shadows fall on attic walls
when sleep has lost all sense of time,
a view of moody ink blue sky
through angled plate glass where I lie,
alert though restless in my room.

At speed, cloud islands hurtle by,
a trail that splits the night in half.
Between their smoke-like dark grey veils,
see spangled sight of seven stars,
a plough suspended from afar.

Polaris winks as if to say
we are at rest, you've had the best.
Sun, moon and earth aligned and gave,
a diamond ring, a fine display.
A clever moon eclipsed the sun,
deserted him to then move on.

© 2019 Christine Anne Shaw


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Chris, your style of lyrically beautiful and graceful verse always puts me in mind of the work of Emily Dickinson. This eloquent, celestial observation in first person proves my point. Brilliant rhyme, cadence, personification, alliteration, metaphor...Your second verse leaves me in awe.... ahhhh one hundred perfect ”spangled sight of seven stars” for this master class poem! Kudos my gifted friend.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Annette I am so happy you liked this one. You are so very generous with your praise. I thank you.read more



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dear Chris... spangled sight of seven stars.., is
only one line that is so classic The Angels sighed
and went around and over the rainbow, and so did I... tenderly, Pat


Posted 4 Months Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Dearest Pat, please forgive the late response to your beautiful review. Many thank yous.

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Patricia Wedel

1 Month Ago

Never too late to visit ... we all have a zillion things to handle. I must write your poem in my Jo.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Pat, you have made my day :) Thank you so much.
I'd like to see some more from your archives! What a gorgeous description of the night sky with an eclipse thrown in like a Christmas present.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much Roland for giving this old poem an airing. I really appreciate that. Plenty of poe.. read more
Not merely a word-painting, a word-movie!
Astronomically accurate and artistically rendered.
Admirable craftsmanship, poetess!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

4 Months Ago

Dear Jimmy, my apologies for not thanking you for your lovely review given five months ago. Better l.. read more
I much prefer your bedtime images to mine, Chris... and certainly more than the sheep we read about. I might raise the blinds tonight and look for a few stars.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Always good to look at the night sky. Thank you for checking this one out.

Chris
a great poetic tale of interstellar dancers, you always seem to write with gusto and passion, another fine example, I do like a bit of moon gazing, meself,

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Many thanks gram, a visit from another moon gazer much appreciated.

Chris
This is just so beautifully written. Majestic. I think that pretty much sums it up.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you Jordan for such a generous review. Much appreciated.

Chris
Marvelous poem. Beautiful, eloquent and observant at the same time... Your description of the eclipse especially in the last verse is phenomenal.. one of the best poems I have read today..:)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Dear Nazia your generous review delights me. Thank you so much for your visit. All good wishes.
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Chris - this is so beautiful. I too love to sit on my deck in the backyard and revel in the beauty of the night.
When I was a teenager and lived down the shore, to sit on the beach and take in the sounds of the waves and the blinking of the stars was a wonder to behold and enjoy. The icing on the cake of course was when there was a full moon sending its' beams across the waves.
Take care - Dave

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you Dave for your lovely review. A fellow star gazer and how could anyone not like the moon? I.. read more
Dave

1 Year Ago

You too, Chris.

Take care - Dave
I slept under a skylight as a kid and drifted off to twinkles every night. Even then, they mesmerised me into happynightnightdreamysleeps. My comfort blanket of sky and stars. Those wispy moonlit clouds used to freak me out though, swallowing all the light.
Better than sitting like a zombie watching a screen any day.
Beautifully penned Chris. A unique view of the beauty of night.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lorry. Twinklies is a gorgeous name for the gems of night. Pleased to meet a fellow star g.. read more
Lorry

1 Year Ago

I also tell the moon my problems, but rarely if ever howl 😀
The most important thing is that I'm transported into your space and frame of mind, and I absolutely am. You paint a pretty picture.

By the end, though, I was a little confused. The second stanza makes it clear that this is night time, while the third disagrees and says we're in the totality of an eclipse. I feel like that's either a mistake or I'm just missing something.

I'm also not sure if there's a metaphor behind the moon "deserting" the sun, but choosing that word asks me to look for one, and I can't find anything.

Really well done, so I don't want to nitpick it, but I'm really not sure if those things were intentional or not.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your visit and your thoughts, truly appreciated. I was restless at night, look.. read more

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Christine Anne Shaw

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