After The Rain

Attempting a sonnet after being totally inspired by Linda Marie Van Tassell's wonderful work. Deeply Abiding Way. They aren't easy to do, and I'm not sure this one is there yet.

September rain cascades throughout the night,
its sorrow lingers unprepared to pass.
I feel the sadness more with morning light
as droplets build to trickle down clear glass.
My silver birch weeps out in sympathy,
each trembling leaf is showered well with wet.
An avalanche of perfect misery,
to wallow in while waiting, though don't fret.
Ash clouds once swirling in their shades of grey,
have taken off their coats of mackintosh.
A cheery sun peeps through to say good day,
to kiss each blade of grass or tufted moss.
My world a diadem of nature's gems,
ablaze in chandeliers and crystal hems.

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Thank you for the shout out. I am glad that I inspired you to write this beautiful sonnet. I have to admit though, I would I had some of that rain here in Virginia. Last year, we got so much rain. This year, it is dry as a boneyard. The grass is more like straw. Sigh! Your lovely words touched a chord, the last line beyond my absolute favorite. I can just see the prisms of color glistening in those crystal hems. Well penned.

[Chris Shaw]

I should be thanking you Linda Marie for the inspiration. I sincerely hope you get some needed rain. We have had it in bucket loads over the last week. On and off all the time, and very heavy with it. I appreciate your thoughts and visit. Thank you.

Chris

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

An avalanche of perfect misery,
to wallow in while waiting, though don't
fret.

Quite lovely how
wallow and cries
are like the rains...


cleansing washing
away the worries
of the day and night.

Makes me think of the owl I hear
in the night with his hooting cries
it's quite beautiful and it's normal
for them to come out in the Autumn
seasons.

Beautifully penned.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Benita, I like where your thoughts went with this poem. Thank you so much for your visit.

Chris

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome 😊

[Chris Shaw]

Have a great week-end:)

[Robert Trakofler]

lovely imagery in here Chris, the form lends itself to this and the infer of the emotions contained with the verbal images has an organic conveyance of the sadness to a glistening smile:) I don't think I ever wrote a sonnet form myself or if i did don't remember:) but reading this makes me think perhaps i should give it a whirl. as usual love your Rhyming queen

[Chris Shaw]

Hl Bunny thank you for another fine review. You have to have to have a go at a sonnet. Having said that, allow yourself plenty of time. I think it is the hardest of all the foms to work with and that's why I don't do many. Pleased you enjoyed my attempts. Have a great day, best wishes winging their way over the pond :)

Chris

[Laura Kate]

Oooh this was so beautiful! I really enjoy the imagery, especially at the end of course when the sun comes out to kiss the grass! Every cloud has a silver lining, the sun shines after every storm. After death comes life and transformation. Lovely message of hope and optimism.
Laura

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you LauraKate. I appreciate your encouraging words. Greatly appreciated.

Chris

[Fairy Khan]

Every line is so beautifully written and expressed. I love this writing of yours.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Fairy. Happy you enjoyed my lines.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

I love this poem dear Chris.
"A cheery sun peeps through to say good day,
to kiss each blade of grass or tufted moss.
My world a diadem of nature's gems,
ablaze in chandeliers and crystal hems."
The above lines. The words make me yearn to read more. They are wonderful and thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Coyote for your wonderful review. It's been sometime since I wrote a sonnet. Pleased you enjoyed this one.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Chris.

[J. Wolfe]

"An avalanche of perfect misery" I really enjoyed this line! On a whole I think you did great and it is very well written. Nice job!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your review. I appreciate your thoughts. All good wishes.

Chris

[alanwgraham]

Well done Chris - this is a beautiful sonnet crafted with art and meaning. I attempted one a few years ago and i can vouch for how hard i found it. It just makes you realise the genius of a poet such as Shakespeare. Your contrast between the grim September rains and the arriving sun hints at a deeper level of meaning.
Well done,
Alan

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Alan, and good on you for trying this tight structure. They are difficult and need concentration. Not good for a wandering mind. I appreciate your visit and your generous review.

Chris

[Richard M]

I'm not sure of the sonnet's nature, but this reads beautifully to me. Well done! Always so love your descriptions and ideas.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Richard. Quite a while since I attempted a sonnet. Glad you enjoyed it.

Chris

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely sonnet filled with wonderful sights and views of nature as she reins autumn down upon us Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks John for your lovely review.

Chris