End Of The Line

End Of The Line

A Poem by Christine Anne Shaw

black carriage awaits
horse drawn for final journey
a fine finale

© 2020 Christine Anne Shaw


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the alliteration matches the sound of the hooves as they beat a song to the cemetery.
This reminds me of Dickinson...
"Because I could not stop for death, he kindly stopped for me, the carriage held but just ourselves and immortality...."
nicely done.
j.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

I love that you think the alliteration matches the sound of hooves and a mention on the same page of.. read more



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It's about leaving this world ? It have beautiful mood even it's sad. Maybe it's can also rain on roof of carriage and there will be storm sounds at far away distance. It's very short but it's touches my heart.

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Thank you, horse and carriage for a funeral. Quite something.This is a senryu 5/7/5 syllables. It wa.. read more
struck my epitaph
and I have purchased my grave
and ghost in my words

Chris I liked this so much this was the only way I could respond

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

2 Weeks Ago

I love the way Bunny has responded. Brevity often has a greater impact. Really focuses the mind. Whe.. read more
so amazing here, this is a wonderful haiku

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for your encouragement. So gratifying Kymberleigh.

Chris
I love the sensate sensibility of this poem. I am in awe of writers who can say so much with so little. Lovely.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for your encouraging review. Your visit welcome and appreciated.

Ch.. read more
A beautiful Haiku my dear! Well stated and in perfect form. ~Sharon

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you Sharon. Hope all is good with you. Keep safe and well.

Chris
The final journey as it carries ones body to it resting place, setting one free to dance among the stars. Nice one.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you Weeping willow for your visit and your thoughts.

Chris
that carriage awaits
us all one day...

for most..a ride
we want to delay as
long as possible..

nicely done senryu


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you Fran Marie, appreciate your visit.

Chris
This brings several things to my mind. First, I thought of the news coverage of George Floyd's funeral and that fancy funeral wagon they carried him in. Also, I hear Peter, Paul and Mary's song, "One Kind Favor".

"There's one kind favor I'll ask of you
There's one kind favor I'll ask of you
Yeah, there's one kind favor I'll ask of you
See that m' grave is kept clean"

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

4 Weeks Ago

Dear Sam, thank you so much for your visit and sharing your thoughts. Hope you are keeping well.
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Chris, you said you'd been writing more senyrus of late and if this is an example of your ability … I am jealous. You have captured the pathos of that last journey perfectly. One we will all take, but not one we will all appreciate.

It brings to mind the scene in A Christmas Carol when Scrooge encounters the black carriage in the hallway of his house.

A good write.
Take care … be safe. (the new mantra)

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Thank you Ted for your encouraging review. Loved A Christmas Carol, a favourite Dickens story. Never.. read more
You even somehow managed to add in the clip clop on cobbles, which is wuite good going, considering it took me more syllables than a haiku just to describe it.
A fine finale indeed Chris, old school proper, with everyone in the village at their door, bowing heads as it passes.
Much preferrable to the modern 15 minute grieving scheduled and then GET OUT!
I think your words deserve a little sigh at the end too.
Sigh....

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Lorry

1 Month Ago

Yep. Yellow sky fireball still here, being all ironic as it comes out to play during lockdown, which.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Yep, like all those idiots demonstrating at the moment with no social distancing. Watch that R figur.. read more
Lorry

1 Month Ago

They'll make pretty corpses with their nice, shiny tan.

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Christine Anne Shaw

Berkshire, United Kingdom



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Have been at Writerscafe for a year now, so pleased I made the change to posting my work here. Have loved reading poetry all my life, but never wrote my first poem until I hit 40. I wish now that I.. more..

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