End Of The Line

black carriage awaits

horse drawn for final journey

a fine finale

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the alliteration matches the sound of the hooves as they beat a song to the cemetery.
This reminds me of Dickinson...
"Because I could not stop for death, he kindly stopped for me, the carriage held but just ourselves and immortality...."
nicely done.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I love that you think the alliteration matches the sound of hooves and a mention on the same page of Dickinson, is more than a compliment. Thank you Jacob. Really appreciate your continued support of my written efforts.

Chris

[CMC]

Neat Haiku, and nice use of alliteration with final, fine, and finale.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your visit.

Chris

[CMC]

Always a pleasure Chris. Thank you for sharing your poetry

[Unspoken poet]

Oh WOW!!
This is so awesome, I love this. Very well written

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Kay-T for your appreciation of my efforts.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

yep...let's pack it all up and put it in that carriage .. weight is ours to bear all life long ... let's give it up now ... in our fine finale ;))))))))))))))))) i love this dahlink ... one can see it as dark or light .. i choose the light :)

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Mr E. I saw this wonderful horse and carriage, I couldn't help myself :)) I have no plans to travel in it myself :)) I was thinking though, there's style for you. Yes, going out in style. I choose the light too. Every time. Hope you are well my friend across the pond. A big thank you for paying me a visit.

Chris

[hayzed]

And so as its inevitability. Ashes we go back to. Nicely done Anne

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you hayzed for your thoughts.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

Much of death's ritual is quite proper, rather formal--unfortunately, culminating in encased worm food.
Let us invest in the immortal human soul; one's physical body does not, at all, fare well.
Strong senryu!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Jimmy for your thoughts and support.

Chris

[;)]

Your senryu says it all, Chris. Its a depressing last ride at the end of the line. I would prefer a horse drawn carriage to a hearse anyday, though. Not that I will notice the difference. Finely articulated.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you. A horse drawn carriage speaks volumes to me. Going out in style. Way to go.

Chris

[augustus]

A sad sight for any family and friends. Relevant at this time of the pandemic!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you augustus. Outside the funeral parlour, reminding us of the many who have lost their lives.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

A final Journey on this earth with the
soft gallop of horses taking me to a place
where Angels weep and flowers grow...
Beautiful in the silouette of grace and beauty...
Evermore. gently, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

You have responded with a beautiful poem Pat. I can hear those horse hooves from here. Thank you so much.

Chris

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I felt the sadness that awaits every journey. Why is death so final? Makes me think...

[Chris Shaw]

I sometimes envy those with faith, who think death is a new beginning. It would be easier to think like that. It is lovely to see you here Ditzy Kat, positively one of my favourite felines. You are in good company with Myron and Hank. Treats for you.

Chris

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I’m always joyful to read you my dearest friend. Thanks for all the love and sending mine to you and Myron and Hank too! Stay safe till kitties can fly over and give you a big hug!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you :))

[AJNJ]

A senryu that takes me deep into that dark, solemn, final journey. I feel a reverence for the hearse. It marks a fine finale to a life on earth and the beginning of another journey, one we will possibly never understand. Appreciated!

[Chris Shaw]

Such a solemn occasion, yet the horse drawn carriage added a touch of special to the final goodbyes. A journey all of us will make. Thank you so much Pestonjee for your continued support on my penned thoughts.

Chris

[AJNJ]

Always my pleasure, Ms. Chris!