Winter Cold

(referring to the recent 13th full moon of the year)

full fat moon frowns down

as earth's citizens struggle

watered down new year

Reviews

[LCat80star]

This (maybe) can symbolise economical struggle. The moon frowning at us is a good imagery as it seems that the moon can be seen as divine. I also thought about how this could also link to climate change, pollution and other environmental destructions as the moon is made of rocks. There are machines being used which damages a lot of natural beauty of earth and now it results in us realising late what actually caused all these pollution/ climate issues. Great work!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Lavi, really enjoyed your interpretation on this poem. It was certainly about struggle and would have involved economical struggle as well.

Chris

[LCat80star]

Thanks. I tried my best.

[VelvetPotato]

I like the way you described the moon as being "full and fat," seems contrasting compared to earth's citizens struggling to get by. "Watered down new year" is also a perfect way to describe the new year, very somber. Last year I was excited for 2020 and the future to come. Going into 2021, with everything humanity has been through, I am more apprehensive. Thoughtful haiku.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Velvet. 2021 has got off to a bad start and 2020 was a year best forgotten. Trying to remain positive. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Broken.]

Oh wow this is exactly how I feel also. "Watered down new year." Hopefully this year is a stronger one.. because I like my drinks fairly strong (: I love the moon and how it takes many forms. But at times it does look like a frown depending where you are in the world, and that I find just as beautiful as I do this piece.

[Chris Shaw]

Let:s hope this year turns out better than last. At the moment it hasn't got off to a good start. Thanks for your thoughts.

Chris

[Rick Puetter]

Interesting and lovely. And strangely enough, I have a somewhat similar one call "The Cold". Loved it. High marks.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Rick. I will see if I can find your poem. I quite like attempting a haiku or senryu every now and again.

Chris

[Rick Puetter]

The Cold: https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/rpuetter/478508/

[barleygirl]

This one hits the mark, as far as my jaded attitude goes! I love your first line, with "f" alliteration that harkens to the other "f" word on the tip my tongue, regarding the covid slaughter that this new year has been so far in the USA -- close to 50,000 dead in 2021. I'm afraid we're going to be watered down for a considerable number of months to come! Love your bright sparkly words to express such dour cynicism! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Margie, 2020 was an f ing horrible year and sadly 2021 has got off to another f ing start. The deaths are horrendous on both sides of the pond. So much sadness and anger too. Let's hope the vaccine makes a difference.

Chris

[Ruth]

Sadly that is exactly how it felt to a lot this New Year ey...watered down and worrying times, this is a stunning, concise Haiku Chris...stay well my friend :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Ruth. A new year, but more of what we endured last year. Really sad and difficult times.

Chris

[Dave]

Christine- an attempt-
trial will be done
soon the flowers will have sprung
love only a hug

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Dave for checking in and for trying one of these yourself. Hope all is OK with you and yours.

Chris

[Dave]

Yes, thanks. Sorry I haven't been around much lately.
Take care - Dave

[DIVYA]

Such a terrible time going on, even the moon frowns, forgoing a smile the earth's citizens so richly deserve after the endless trials and travails. Yet, so low key and somber it all remains even in the New Year. Your words are richly thoughtful as ever, dear Chris. I hope you're very well and staying safe. Take care ❤

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you DIVYA, yes a new year not like any other. So many people suffering. Hoping 2021 is a vast improvement on last tear. Keep safe dear poet.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

We're both writing about the cold. But this poem is more than just cold; it speaks of a sadness and a struggle to be in peace and calm in our world; yes the New Year was watered down because of the chaos around us and the inability to move around freely. Hope 2021 will be much better.
Truly Yours,
Betty

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Betty. I sincerely hope it won't be too long before the science eliminates this nasty virus. We all deserve a break from it. All good wishes.

Chris

[Just Kim]

Awesome Haiku, LOVE this write

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Kim. A belated happy new year to you. Keep safe and healthy.

Chris

[Just Kim]

you too, keep writing always

[Chris Shaw]

I'll try :)) That's if the muse has me in her favour. She doesn't always :)

[Just Kim]

I know that feeling lately...

[Chris Shaw]

........:))