A Text Too Many

out of the blue

from the forests of time

a message was left

it would be good to talk

.

concisely short

a bullseye dart

pointed and poisoned

it grazed on my heart

.

nostalgia it carried

on a cool autumn breeze

i remembered how once

i was brought to my knees

.

so what do you want

from your fine Surrey garden

maybe the chablis is

seeking my pardon

.

on a warm afternoon

i could easily be swayed

except i recalled

i was dumped and betrayed

.

so i chose to ignore you

and didn't reply

yet not without wiping

a tear from each eye

.

Reviews

[Neville]

this is unusually good but not at all unusual .. and I don't mean that you just wrote a bloomin good bit o poetry .. its good to talk and from both a personal and professional perspective, I am acutely aware that so many problems start from the moment a silence is first conceived ..................... Neville :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Neville Yes silence is golden at times and deadly at others. It seems I have a propensity to keep my mouth shut when most women can't close theirs for love nor money :) I have to confess I have since spoken to the subject of this poem who was fortunate enough to be my first husband :)

Chris

[Neville]

I take it I can stand down then and a hit is no longer required :)

[Chris Shaw]

:)...............

[lightsong]

Sometimes it’s too late to fix things, to ask for a reconciliation when in the past kindness and care were out of sight and heart, there is big difference between going separated ways with healthy attitude and even sometimes we need to grow alone and then meet again later, and the unnecessary pain someone may put us through not for growing nor for anything else…. and after we are healed boooooomb!…. suddenly they appear from no where like they did nothing!?!? do they feed on our strength and genuine feelings… yes it can be. I strongly feel You dear Chris, wise and good choice You made up there :>

[Chris Shaw]

Dear lightsong, thank you so much for checking in with your thoughts. It's always good to hear from you. Take care.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

Been there Chris, it tugs at your heartstrings but you know you mustn't go there again.
Leave the door closed, once opened you will trap your fingers again..

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Stella, so good to see you. Thanks for checking in. Hope all is good with you and your family. I appreciate the thoughts you have shared here. Always good to see you.

Chris

[Lathen Griffiths]

It’s a lovey piece you’ve written here. There’s no bitterness or lack of civility from the poet but there’s a sense of detaching oneself from a situation possibly to save oneself from more hurt. As for chablis, is it wine or a place. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Lathe. I think he had drunk more than his fair share of the Chablis. Must have been on a nostalgia trip. So appreciate your thoughtful review.

Chris

[lovelymarina]

This really hit for me. The type of poem that makes you feel past emotions from even a "forever ago" breakup. But boy is it bittersweet when you can finally no longer feel that pain, and be able to say your peace without having to wipe any tears. The imagery of flooding memories of a past lover, months of a healing process and finally, happiness, or at least "okayness". It's definitely a vivid and emotional piece of writing, and I really, really loved it. Thank you for making me feel things.
Xx
Marina

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Marina, many thanks for your very encouraging review. You are appreciated and so pleased that you stopped by today.

Chris

[Dave]

The pain of lost love, especially when they were, we thought, "the one." Remembering the devastation we felt helps to make it easier to not pardon the cruel we felt. It seems as though you are truly speaking from a broken heart, now on the mend.
Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Some hurts take longer to heal than others Dave. Many thanks for stopping by. Have a great Sunday.read moreSome hurts take longer to heal than others Dave. Many thanks for stopping by. Have a great Sunday.

Chris

[Kerra]

another nostalgia write, You are really good with these types of writes.
I can feel this write. Nicely presented Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Kerra, I thank you for your visits and your thoughts. You are appreciated.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

There are hurts and then there are hurts. Some leave such a deep scar that the pain can be revived in an instant even after many years have passed. Who can tell what the sender of the text wished to accomplish by it? Sometimes, especially if lingering pain can be relieved, it is good to renew old, if negative, acquaintances. Other times, it's better to let sleeping dogs lie. This case sounds like the latter.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your insightful review John. You are appreciated.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

A love gone wrong
with a hurtful message
those bullseye darts
poisoned and pointed
are never nice notes
to.receiveout of the blue
well expressed piece here
so nicely penned

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Fran, always appreciate your thoughts. Thank you for stopping by.

Chris

[Unspoken poet]

I can feel sadness through out your write, sorry if you are going through a hardship....

[Chris Shaw]

No hardship really at all. Just a bit of nostalgia for what once was and is no more. Thanks Kimmie.

Chris

[Gee]

Good to talk my arse, it was hide the sausage that prompted the text, I know !!
The poem so much better than my comment Christine

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks for the smile Gee. Happy Halloween.

Chris