Transition

echoes from the past
empty rooms weep in silence
a new broom sweeps clean

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Kind of feels like this Senryu is related to your Rendezvous poem. You swept up the echos and found something more to write about in the pile of past. I wanted to attach the two since Senryu is about the foibles of mankind and they seemed relative to each other.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Bill. The two poems were not linked in any way so I found your shared thoughts interesting. Thanks for reading.

Chris

[DIVYA]

A very relatable poem for me, here. An old neighbour died quietly yesterday, the hearse took him away and today morning, I noticed someone sweeping his yard clean. "a new broom sweeps clean", beautifully expressed dear Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear DIVYA, pleased you could relate to this piece. Yes it gives feelings of sadness, but also confirm that life moves on. I so appreciate your share abd you stopping by.

Chris

[DIVYA]

I always love reading your poetry ❤

[W. Barrett Munn]

I think this works so well due to the diction choices. empty/silence echo the vowel sound; new/broom/sweeps/clean
these slant rhymes contribute to the musicality. Even the “s” sounds of echoes/past contribute. excellent choices all around

Winston

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Winston, thank you for your very encouraging review. Good to see you. Take care.

Chris

[red93]

Very interesting Chris and shows there is still plenty of life in the 5-7-5 format.
Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Tony. I am really fond of the 5/7/5 format. Pleased you enjoyed this one.

Chris

[Dave]

Sometimes those echoes resound. The silence heard is only in the mind. Echoes are swept away by a hope-filled tomorrow
A very thoughtful write, Chris.

Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dave. Quite a sad situation. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Red Brick Keshner]

Again, I ask, where is the like or heart button on this here site!? This is poetry that definitely rides the top of my range of pilgrimage. The past weeping the silence and the broom sweeping... the almost sterile emptiness of cleaning... the heart and mind dances and bounces to and fro in the reading. This is magnificent Chris !
Freds.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Freds, thank you so much for your appreciation and visit. Have a good Sunday.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

Sweeping the Cobwebs of yesterday where dust rose to higher realms of Enlightenment… we wonder why the clouds of doubt encompass our days. The Rays of Sunshine seem to bring Hope Eternal. Blessings of Colors in Amber Gold. tenderly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Pat for your beautiful and poetic response. Have a happy Sunday. Sending love across the pond.

Chris

[Neville]

Sadly, and ever so, this is an excellent example of one of my favourite poetic forms Chris.

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Neville for stopping by. Yes, senryu and haiku, a favourite of mine too. Have a good Sunday.

Chris

[Weeping willow]

Few words that say so much, can feel them ;-}

[Chris Shaw]

Your thoughts dear Weeping willow are appreciated. Many thank yous.

Chris

[softlyfall]

Sweeping is a lot like smoke from sage sticks for encouraging old energy to move on. And the rhythmic motion amplifies that intent. It becomes a meditative dance of soul cleansing.
Thank you for sharing this, Chris, it really resonates with me

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Amy thank you for your share.Pleased this senryu resonates with you. All the best.

read moreDear Amy thank you for your share.Pleased this senryu resonates with you. All the best.

Chris

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A haunting little senryu with a clever ending. I live in an apartment complex and recently saw that a neighbor who lived in their place for years surprisingly moved out. I could only imagine the years of memories accumulated there in those rooms. And how fast it was cleaned out and ready to be rented within days. Nice piece Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Carlos, it took less than four hours to remove all trace that my aunt had lived in that apartment for over 40 years. Quite something. Many thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Chris

[Pauline]

Sad to read Chris. (You're in my thoughts.) xx P.