On the Scent of Pine

imagine
if all the souls
of our long departed
lit up the pine forest
at night like fireflies
in love

chasing
winking and blinking
beckoning us to their party
having a ball
while we

in wide eyed wonder
in silence and gratitude
watch in awe
a taste of timeless
of heaven’s potential
on the scent of
lasting pine

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

wow, where did this come from:) what a delightful dream of a poem dear Chris! I clicked on this cause I love the smell of pine but I wasn't expecting this poem... what a fun trick! I would of course want to jump into the air and join them all "bunny-like" but alas I'm no spring bunny anymore LOL so I guess I would have to wait

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Bunny. I have been fascinated with fireflies for such a long time but have never seen them in the flesh so to speak. It will also be the first anniversary of my mum!s passing tomorrow , so she is on my mind. I guess the two pointed my muse in this direction. Really pleased you stopped by.

Chris

[Pauline]

Hi Chris. Living out in Malaysia we used to see these dancing fairies every night which was always a treat.
I love your poem by the way, but then it's always a treat to read your work.
(Hope you're looking after yourself.xx) P.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Pauline. Pleased you enjoyed the read. All good here, hope the same for you x

[Sherice]

I like it! I know that is not much of a review, but I don't have much experience with poetry. I'm starting classes next week for my MFA in Creative Writing, and there are a few poetry classes I have to take, so I will be reading a lot of poems to help myself learn. Thank you for sharing!

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Sherice, so pleased you stopped by to read and leave your thoughts. Good luck with your creative writing classes. I hope you stay on writerscafe.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Timelessness of heaven's potential...This would be an unbelievable celebration of their souls, plus the everlasting scent of pine, which I love...( have all the the candles)... you dear Chris have an amazing imagination to have put this creative poem together....and it would be memorialized forever.....
Best, B

[Chris Shaw]

Betty you always offer so much encouragement in your reviews. I am truly thankful to you.
read moreBetty you always offer so much encouragement in your reviews. I am truly thankful to you.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

I will; I need it too! You're very welcome Chris!!!
Best, B

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Betty , that drat read more keeps popping up automatically after responses. It sounds so cheeky lol. Have a good day.

[willweb]

The solitude of a forest of pine trees, hearing the wind rustle gentle through the needles, an occasional pinecone falling and fireflies, tiny points of light that flicker and flitter about while we imagine they are long past loved ones. How soothing is that? Beautiful Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you will for your kind words. Your reviews are always so encouraging. You are very much appreciated.

Chris

[Pete]

dearest chris. i am in awe of this piece and all of its splendor and magnificence. my mouth hung open as i read. it shot an emotional arrow straight to the bullseye of my heart. if this doesn't lift the spirit then i don't know what ever would. from the title and everything on down. powerfully spiritual, uplifting and enlightening. i will proudly shelve this for dark times. bravo. outstanding ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Pete, your encouraging review has given me a lift too. So pleased that these words spoke to you. I have only ever seen fireflies on tv, but even that, I found a spiritual experience. They fascinated me with their light in a forest of darkness. A little bit of heaven. A big thank you.

Chris

[Pete]

my sheer pleasure and delight. i doubt we are ever the same after seeing a firefly. i happily recall seeing them as a child and chasing after them. we never forget such things. to this day my spirit lights up more than them when i am blessed to see one. thank you for the gift of yourself and your poetry ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

You are too kind. Pete I have tried to review your work for the last couple of days, but it won’t allow me. Each poem I zap on it comes up that there is a writerscafe fault. Just to let you know in case others are having the same problem. I will keep trying .

[Chris Shaw]

This is what keeps coming up

A problem repeatedly occurred on
https://www.writerscafe.org/ptine.”

I don’t get that trying to access other poet’s library

[moog-drika]

I'll keep imagining this if I ever land up alone in a pine forest. It's going to help me feel relaxed.
Ahh the visuals! So beautiful that I'm awestruck.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you moog-drika. Pleased you stopped by today with your thoughts. All the best to you.

Chris

[JustPlainHere]

What a gorgeous image of souls here. I love the incorporation of light and the recycling of life in this as well. The idea of souls lighting the dark is not only beautiful but profound and appropriate for souls. A really moving piece of work, I really enjoyed.

[Chris Shaw]

That’s a really kind review you have left here. Thank you so much, your visit is really appreciated. Have a good Monday.

Chris

[Soren]

Ah Chris and who says they don't? Just that we may not be able to see this from where we are. It would be a glorious sight indeed. A beautiful thought and wonderful write.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for an uplifting review. Now wouldn’t that be lovely Soren? I appreciate you stopping by.

Chris

[Cherrie Palmer]

I never feel alone in the forest and this must be why.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Cherrie, pleased you stopped by today. All the best.

Chris

[Doodley]

I think if this was to be true, that pine forest would be the brightest place on earth. Millions upon millions of fireflies congregating and celebrating the lives that were once lived. It made me think of reincarnation and I suppose returning as a firefly is not all that bad an idea.

This poem reminds me of something written in a moment of daydreaming thought. Completely out of the blue yet an idea that creates a lasting image of the possibility of what heaven could be.

Intriguing idea, well expressed.

[Chris Shaw]

When I do my housework Doodley, I daydream quite a lot. It helps break up the monotony. I just imagined the brilliance of the flickering lights in their magnitude. I also love fairy lights and have them at home too. All year round, not just at Christmas. Thank you for your visit and thoughts, very much appreciated.

Chris

[lightsong]

You have my tears, my heart, my soul into this dearest Chris... someone who knows, understands and feels the divine of pine' scent, and write it in that sublimity way is a Golden Soul.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you lightsong for your beautiful thoughts. I love the scent of pine and I love light as well. I appreciate you.

Chris