Captive

Captive

A Poem by alienated.aquarius
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slaves to corporate systems

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Capitalism holds you captive

Avoid the void

Fill with vanity

You can’t keep anything

Not even if you die buried with it.

 

What, so now you have

Nothing to say?

Why so silent,

Cash got your tongue? 

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© 2019 alienated.aquarius


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I am undecided about this piece. I agree with some of your reviewers that this is either incomplete or lukewarm or muddled . . . not nearly as effective as your bold statements in writing usually are. I agree with one reviewer that I get tired of hearing a series of complaints in some of your pieces without having any solutions or suggestions. It's easy to rant, it's hard to solve problems. Finally, having worked for corporations for 30+ years & pretty much feeling disgusted by them in some of the ways you mention, at the same time, I also really benefited during a time when corporations had a modicum of loyalty to their employees. Nowadays, as they say: "it's a gig economy" -- meaning people are piecing together odd jobs & part-time contract positions with no benefits, etc. -- it's a f*****g b***h out there in the job market without the comfort & reliability we used to have working for a corporation for years, having full benefits & vacation & sick leave & college assistance, on-the-job training, etc. This stuff just isn't happening anymore. So I see corporate America in a dichotomous way, both good & bad. The real problem is greed. There's no allegiance to people anymore. It's all about profit. Despite my rather critical review, I always love that you stimulate conversation & thinking, which is something I don't do in my own writing & I probably should! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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I work for myself and haven't capitulated to capitalism I make next to nothing and we are very close:) BUT I do what I love and that is art the promoting of, selling, making, singing, drumming, composing and dining of it:) but for the green stuff never all that fond of its taste and I'm pretty sure it isn't fond of me for as quick as it comes in it leaves me even quicker! so in long bunny speak I'm saying I couldnt agree with you more

Posted 3 Months Ago


Well written piece. Well Done.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I'm intrigued by the last line...instead of Cat Got your tongue...
I think that many who have are feeling a bit of guilt because have nothing...they feel selfish but try to deflect that feeling...i know there may not be an actual solution in this poem...but there is a good question? or questions..What do you think you can take with you in the end? And why aren't you saying anything? Do i have you pegged? Are you so full of vanity that you can't see the almighty dollar has you by the ....whatever?

As Margie said...your writings spur conversation and debate...that is a good thing.
j.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I am undecided about this piece. I agree with some of your reviewers that this is either incomplete or lukewarm or muddled . . . not nearly as effective as your bold statements in writing usually are. I agree with one reviewer that I get tired of hearing a series of complaints in some of your pieces without having any solutions or suggestions. It's easy to rant, it's hard to solve problems. Finally, having worked for corporations for 30+ years & pretty much feeling disgusted by them in some of the ways you mention, at the same time, I also really benefited during a time when corporations had a modicum of loyalty to their employees. Nowadays, as they say: "it's a gig economy" -- meaning people are piecing together odd jobs & part-time contract positions with no benefits, etc. -- it's a f*****g b***h out there in the job market without the comfort & reliability we used to have working for a corporation for years, having full benefits & vacation & sick leave & college assistance, on-the-job training, etc. This stuff just isn't happening anymore. So I see corporate America in a dichotomous way, both good & bad. The real problem is greed. There's no allegiance to people anymore. It's all about profit. Despite my rather critical review, I always love that you stimulate conversation & thinking, which is something I don't do in my own writing & I probably should! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Interesting, but not thoughtful. Ultimately not convincing and a put-off or just a toss-and-ignore. Yeah, capitalism sucks, and, according to Jonathan Tepper in his book, “The Myth of Capotalism,” what we know as capitalism isn’t what most people think it is. So I suggest taking a real stand and offer an alternative. Embrace anarchy, or communism. If you can’t leave middle-of-the-roaders to their delusions.

Still, some interesting turns of phrase. I liked:
Cash got your tounge? – Derivative but cool
Avoid the void – Again, derivative, but I don’t think Pizza Hut will sue
You can’t keep anything – I think you’re onto something here, but there is not enough space to let it flower.

Posted 3 Months Ago


good but not good enough. keep writing more. why hold back? attack!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Love the line ...cash got your tongue...

I can't hang with the premise, I've seen Poland before the wall fell where the government gave or withheld cards to be able to buy meat, bread, or produce.

I never thought of work as being captive, or providing for those who count on me as my prison. Carinf for them is my pleasure, a duty of love.

Now the children of those who claim entitlement are truly captive by a unlocked cage and a empty stomach.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Very well written and truthful

Posted 3 Months Ago


Really truthful write, as so many put undue pressure on themselves because they believe that's how you climb the ladder of success ;-] But really after you gain everything in life. Dullness sets in as there is nothing else.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I was not a fan until "cash got your tongue..." Hella slick, mate... Especially "fill with vanity"... Another good one... I like to think one is not a slave as one avoids the shackles... Who knows, though... Keeps my head up, though... This short but succinct work does its work of working the muck...

Posted 3 Months Ago



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