For you.

For you.

With an eye for genuine wisdom,
I clutched your hand and lured you in.
Across an enchanted forest with impassable fog,
I made out your face and it was honest beauty.

You hymned my name through the soft coiled mist,
I replied with what I thought a memorable kiss.
Covered with impeccable virtue and confident style,
I rose to my feet and stared for a time.

With shivers and shocks from your mesmerising debris,
I fell into a dream where I strolled on the sea.
But still I searched for your dear vacant soul,
To uncover and save it was my only ambition.

You laughed and cried and never whispered goodbye,
It was a staggering day though full of passionate sighs.
Yet still in my mind I pondered the heavenly,
Your elegant figure succumbed to my imaginable finger.

I noticed you in a dream last night bordering confession,
Our eyes sealed with an everlasting obsession.
I had you then but now I cease to ask for reality,
Was it I you adored, or the company we implored?

Chris Holmberg.

Reviews

[Sam Severn]

This has an ancient, old-timey mystical n' mythical feel like it's been carved in rock by children on a remote mountain top....My favorite verse is the 4th, n' the mysterious image you paint of "my imaginable finger"....You rocked me like a lyric from Led Zeppelin IV. Your words ring like a guitar, n' "For You" hit me like the hammer of the gods. ㋡

[Helena]

Excellent write! Top marks for this. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.

[?]

wow,wow,wow,wow,
wow Chris this was wonderful
So beautiful
"You hymned my name through the soft coiled mist,"
thats my fav, awesome work

[Timtim]

Now this is a good piece, it presents a very interesting love adventure. And i especially love the ending... Awesome.

[Mauricio Montoya]

This is a great piece of work for whoever s heart you're trying to reach, in every stanza you can see the love filled with emotion. I can see you gave this careful thought in bringing this together.
Excellent write.

[steph]

You have a unique talent for this kind of writing, I am envious

[Brad Baum]

Such beautiful writing. You paint a brutal, emotional and raw picture of a relationship between two people. Truly chilling. You made me feel along with the speaker, which is a difficult thing to achieve. Enjoyed the format as well. Fantastic write. Will be sure to check out the rest of your work.

[Michael Todd]

Wow Chris this is a wonderful poem. I loved this line, "You hymned my name through the soft coiled mist,".
Excellent job

[Cassiopia Summers]

You are indeed a good writer. (: Your works are enjoyable, and leave you thinking of many things. Thanks for that!

[absolutefolie]

Wow, I really love this. Beautifully written :)

[FireWoman]

Lovely melancholy musing~