Enshrined

Eveloped by desire.

I'm drawing my eyes on the walls around you.
I hope you don't mind being-
unknowingly spied,
wrongly enshrined.
　
I paint enchanting vines on the tiles before you.
Dazzling white; your dress flutters-
entangling the sultry air;
exhibiting your care.
　
You trickle down the steps, flooding the streets where we met.
My everything bows to your eyes- 
for you are the feat.
A mesmerizing greet.

 

You light your fire with green trees, an incessant breeze.
I paint rain for you to see-
with your back against me.
Still, your fire survives.

 

I draw promiscuous roses on your loyal face.
Yet you have no improper grace.
I tell you myths of old;
In your ears; I see they are cold.

 

With such a mischievous glare as you so often stare.
I as one conform to your rare dare...
With such a sudden shiver to my spine,
I'm so strongly enshrined.
　

 

Author's Note

My most recent poem, about the girl of my dreams. Hopefully she becomes a reality.

Reviews

[underwriter]

thats beautiful! i hope she does become a reality for you too!
"I draw promiscuous roses on your loyal face" wonderful line!
i also love your last stanza!
"With such a mischievous glare as you so often stare.
I as one conform to your rare dare...
With such a sudden shiver to my spine,
I'm so strongly enshrined."
it sends a shiver down my spine! love it!

Stalker...but I understand. Lol. You make the role seem quite fabulous with your words. I enjoyed the read.

[:)]

I hope the girl of your dreams becomes a reality too ..

[Sunflower 20]

wow, i love it. its so beatiful and enchanting. i think any girl who had this dedicated to her would be over the moon!

Great job!! :)

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Very beautifully written, probably the best rhymed poem on the whole of WritersCafe! Certainly puts my writing to shame ^^

[Moflo]

This is a very good poem. Very descriptive and great images. Good job.

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your rhyme is just perfect in this..its very spoken word as the rhyme picks up just in the right places..very nice use of descriptive verse..

[chad]

better then me i suck at writing

[Warren L.G De Mills]

Cool man , have faith she'll be real, this made me think of my girl lol. this was pretty good only complaint is the over done rhyming," glare as you often stare...rare dare" seems like a bit much to me,

[An owl on the moon]

I hope your dream becomes reality as well.. So beautifully voiced, with that strength of daring wonder... a love worth waiting for.