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Just some things that came out... no punctuation just read it fast and keep the flow :)

Is it me or is it you

Complications from the truth

You should have lied

You should have tried

To fill the soul with many lies

 

The truth can kill

And lies don’t heal

They ease the pain before the kill

You broke my trust

Teased with lust

Made me feel

What was never real

 

A sickening feeling

Deep inside

Hearts on fire

Burning bright

You won me over

With lustful screams

Then slowly drowned

Away my dreams

 

My heart was blind

My sight alive

Could not see past all the lies

Too blind to see

Too dumb to read

All the signs

In front of me

 

Now I’m alone

I should have known

To never trust you

In my home

You failed to see

The good in me

And now you’re just

A memory

 

 

 

Author's Note

Please let me know your thoughts... thanks

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Hmmm... As for the poem, i think its very well done. As for the meaning...now i'm speaking, based on personal experience... Well, i'd only write poems like this, if my relationship with someone i love would break. When someone i love...or to pick up the poem's atmosphere a little better, someone i used to love shatters my heart. Anyhow, you did great.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you IM.... I appreciate your review :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome:)

[Jamestown]

Great piece of writing that I can relate to no doubt:( awesome flow, great
wording and unfortunately sad but true message! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you James I appreciate your comments. Sometimes it just works out that way my friend. My future is bright though lots to be happy about :)

[SheIsMe]

I really liked this one. The last four lines took my breath away. The memories of what once was are always the hardest to overcome. Great job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... they are the hardest to over come... especially 10 years of those feelings. Thanks for your review :)

[Sami Khalil]

"You failed to see
The good in me
And now you’re just
A memory"

You are so right. A lot of things go unnoticed or ignored in a relationship. A splendid poem...:)................

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Sami... a lot of things do go unnoticed and if it goes on too long it can be the end of it all. Appreciate your review my friend :)

[Sami Khalil]

So true. You are welcome...:)...................

[Perkele.7885]

I prefer the truth to lies, just the way that I play the game. Nice flowing poem though. I hope you found truth for your character at the end!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Perkele.... I definitely did... the truth sets us free :)

[Perkele.7885]

I read it again today for kicks and giggles. Lies are just a bad omen for any relationship~ or even a friendship!

[AaronFreitas]

haha thanks buddy :)

[B]

Love it
Classic love trouble

And trouble loves love lol

[AaronFreitas]

lol you got that right my friend. Thanks for the review :)

[~]

Almost out of breath from reading it fast :) kidding :)
A great flow, your sadness resurfaces again, and fills the pages. your pen writes of what the heart hurts the most.
blessings to you my friend!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks moonskittles... sometimes it hurts sometimes it's fine. Just depends on the day I guess :)

[azaleablue]

its really interesting to think of the story behind this, its a good piece :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend.... I could write a novel on the story behind this haha... thanks for you review I appreciate it :)

[wordman]

manipulation seems to be taught in our colleges today,get what you want,get what you need
then cut and watch them bleed,or maybe there conscious bothered them so they came clean

[AaronFreitas]

Very true my friend... as a society we reward those that manipulate and use others. Thanks for your comments wordman you are much appreciated my friend :)

[W R Stowe]

Oh my Lord is this a powerful testament of my previous relationship.She had used my lust to manipulate and control me for 7 years.I thought I loved her actually I did but though I thought it but my Ex girl's sister told me that she told her I was only around for the financial assistance.Every time she would leave I found myself taking her back in again until one day I said no to the sex she'd wanted and I was finally set free from her hold on me.not long afterwards God brought my wife into my life and now I am happy

Bill

[AaronFreitas]

I went through something similar my friend... someday I will find that someone that makes me happy :)Thank you for the review :)

[W R Stowe]

Oh by the way title it Love is blind and your welcome