Are we alone?

Are we alone?

A Story by AaronFreitas
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Real short true story... this was me last night.

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I could feel it… she was standing there watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

 

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Than.. read more
alf

9 Years Ago

Cool!! I'll keep reading your writes!!!!
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you buddy I appreciate that



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Nope, never.
Is this a true story?
Intriguing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Yes it is... also on a different night woke up with scratches on my upper back/shoulder and a little.. read more
Bluefire

9 Years Ago

Oh, but as soon as you let your gaurd down it'll get nasty again. x3
I wake up with scratches.. read more
This was super scary and an absolutely spot on writeup! Now I'll probably be afraid to sleep alone or what I think of as ''alone'' :'D I especially liked the way you used ''subconsciously'' to depict that the experience was out of the physical world. Beautifully written, Aaron! Hats off! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Bushra.... I was hoping it would be a little scary haha... appreciate your revie.. read more
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Wow, was she pretty at least? ;);) I hope so! A good question that opens a whole can of worms, so I won't go there, but a fun and thought provoking write for sure :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you moonskittles... more like a shadow than anything... she could at least come cuddle with me.. read more
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9 Years Ago

lol.. watch out what you wish for ;)
That last sentence gave me the chills! Who knows what could be watching us at any given time. A person, a demon, an angel, some ghostly entity, who knows! This poem is a good reminder to stay on your toes, because you never know what could happen.
And the fact that this happened to you makes it extra chilling! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I appreciate your review Amber... it is creep to think at all times there is something or someone wa.. read more
We are not alone, I know this for a fact. You have to learn to acknowledge this and live with "it" in peace. Good luck :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Yes indeed... I have and no complaints here :) It does get lonely here alone... at least she's my f.. read more
Sydney

9 Years Ago

Of course! This topic is right up my alley, glad to discuss :]
A interesting poem. When I was stationed in Germany. I lived in old building. The sounds were many in the night. You set-up place and vision for the reader. I like the poetry that ask questions. Your poem did. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Coyote... always glad to hear your thoughts :) Don't ever be shy load me up wit.. read more
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
This is awesome!
I love it, really well done!



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Silent Raven :)
Sort of creepy...but still good...lol.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much... creepy is what it was :)
Good writing there, my friend. And yes, we are never alone.

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AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend. Appreciate your review :)
whoa......creepy......
yes we are never truly alone.......
amazing write......
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Pushkar.... it is creepy and we never are alone my friend. Glad you liked it bu.. read more

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