Padded Walls

Something different... no not about me :)

Wrap me up... strap me up

Throw away the key

Locked in a room, I lay to spoon

With a shadow of me

      Shut them up!!!

      Tell them to stop!!!

      These voices wont cease!

Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e

Thoughts unwind

Bite my tongue, just for fun

Where is my mind?

Pad these walls… ignore the calls

I must be crazy

Hear the cries… my soul lies

Visions hazy

       “Just do it

       kill yourself

       do the world a favor”

I cannot lie… the voice inside

Says take my life

So I jump to fly

I fall and cry

But cannot die

So wrap me up, strap me up

Throw away the key

It’s obvious this padded room

Is the end of me,

 

 

Author's Note

Read and review please :)

Reviews

[Maja]

Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this write and I am glad you as a reader enjoyed :) Thank you

[ROXANE DORSEY]

I been in a padded room. and can understand this poetry. thanks for sharing. I love this piece.

[Nirupama.H]

Really strong lines you've got there ! Terrifying-ly clear images.
Keep exploring this "something new " side of yours :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Indeed this is so terrifying! But it is amazing how you depicted it so vividly.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Nadia... I got so many questions asking if this happened to me but it was an experience on the outside looking in and what I witnessed someone going through. It was a fun, challenging write... I swear sometimes an idea comes into mind and the thoughts fall into place and when I look back I forget where I drifted to mentally when I wrote it :)

[SheIsMe]

I really like this. It flowed very well and I must admit, I started reading it in the form of DMX's prayers. I too have felt suffocated by my own self. Great job! Very lyrical!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend :) I believe we have similar feelings and outlook on things... I know I always relate to your writings too :) I appreciate your review :) I have one of your poems open with like 10 others I just haven't been able to get to them to review yet... hopefully tonight :)

[SheIsMe]

If you're writing vs reading, I can allow it ;-)

[AaronFreitas]

haha I haven't got to either yet... forgive me? I was actually digging through an old laptop I finally got to work and just found all my old writings and songs :)

[Bern_Bright]

I hope this isn't a stupid question ( but I'll justify it by saying I don't know much about poetry): Is there significance to the last sentence ending in a comma?

[AaronFreitas]

Nope none at all haha... it was actually just a typo but for some reason a lot of people liked it like it was done on purpose to just kind of abruptly end as if not planned so I left it. :)

[Bern_Bright]

Happy accident,

[Pryde Foltz]

Pretty tortuous and powerful stuff. It's those nasty thoughts again … they like to get a hold sometimes, don't they?

[AaronFreitas]

Yes they do...I am glad I haven't been in those shoes. I took this one from a different point of view and applied my experiences with people in these circumstances for this write :)

[Terrence Chang]

Aaron I got a suggestion to make instead of
"Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e" it should be
"Rocking on the floor and banging on the door"
and rest is perfect

[Kay]

I immensely enjoyed your poem. You produced powerful words of solitude and what it’s like to be on the edge of insanity--it’s not a welcoming place. Well done! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you :) this was one of my favorites to write... thanks for your review :)

[Daisy]

wow..... such emotions... are real and so frightened... great poem and words....

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Daisy... had to get a little creative and crazy with this one :)