Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)
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Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this writ.. read moreThank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this write and I am glad you as a reader enjoyed :) Thank you
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Oh my
What an intense write
The padded room might be the mind in a tangle
I see the angles of distress and confusion
The withdrawal of the world
A tightness
That can only be resolved
With a nice book
And a cone of ice cream - vanilla flavor swirled on the perfect crispy biscuit cone lol
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haha I am definitely down for some ice cream :) lol I can't imagine being locked up in a padded roo.. read morehaha I am definitely down for some ice cream :) lol I can't imagine being locked up in a padded room I think my mind would just explode! Appreciate your review :)
I've never been kept in a padded room but the thought processes sound very familiar. It's questionable to me how isolation is supposed to benefit one with such mental impairment and ideation; it would seem that the starkness of the isolation would allow more bad thoughts to flow unabated. A very perceptive write, Aaron. Well done! take care...dan
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Thank you very much Dan. I mentioned in some responses that I've had to watch someone in a padded r.. read moreThank you very much Dan. I mentioned in some responses that I've had to watch someone in a padded room and on suicide watch and it's definitely an experience unlike any other. One man in particular would talk in 3 or 4 different voices... his voice, a softer voice and a demonic creepy voice. The last was a screaming yelling voice sometimes and it was just crazy to witness a conversation within one amongst several voices out loud. I am glad you liked it buddy :)
8 Years Ago
Aaron, Did you work in a psychiatric treatment facility? I believe what you say, but I been there/do.. read moreAaron, Did you work in a psychiatric treatment facility? I believe what you say, but I been there/done that, on suicide watch but they just strapped me down to a bed with no sheets, no way to reach a wall....yeah, it was about as fun as it sounds. take care...dan
Wow Aaron I think this is my new fav poem....
I love every single thing about this piece it is beyond my words....I love really really love this piece it is amazing
Thank you very much Micky... I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was hoping for something a little different.. read moreThank you very much Micky... I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was hoping for something a little different and a little erratic so I am glad it's enjoyed by you :)
8 Years Ago
I really like the flow the rhythm is excellent I really hope you write more pieces like this piece
this is really good!
It is written very well and in a unique way that works for the poem. This really is a piece of art.
Really, i wish i could give more input than that but overall its just a damn good poem.
Good Shtuff (:
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Thank you very much Reeg... I tried to do unique and just something a little different. Glad you lik.. read moreThank you very much Reeg... I tried to do unique and just something a little different. Glad you liked it :)
Good one Aaron. Its strange, weird and hard to digest that loneliness often kills oneself and takes away all the hope of their existence. Even if we want to we fail to overcome at times its so very dangerous. Thanks for sharing :)
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Thank you very much Mitali... I definitely wouldn't want to experience it thats for sure! I appreci.. read moreThank you very much Mitali... I definitely wouldn't want to experience it thats for sure! I appreciate your review :)
A great write about the terrible things people went through in mental institutions and the like
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It is definitely a touchy subject... I couldn't imagine being restrained like that I'd go crazy too!.. read moreIt is definitely a touchy subject... I couldn't imagine being restrained like that I'd go crazy too! haha appreciate your review buddy :)
Aaron this is brilliant...you feel the change in pace throughout that manic feeling, the isolation. Such a sad dark write but you wrote it beautifully my friend !! Love it
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Thank you Sereena... I was shooting for good flow yet kind of erratic. I mentioned in another respo.. read moreThank you Sereena... I was shooting for good flow yet kind of erratic. I mentioned in another response that I've observed someone in a padded suicide room and it's crazy. One day 3 different voices and the next total temporary normal. I actually get to testify on a 3rd strike case... incident when I worked in the jail but the guys 3rd strike is an assault against me. He is in a mental hospital for the mean time but he belongs in a straight jacket and padded room... I heard different voices come out of him that would make the devil ask who that way haha... appreciate your review :)
great sense of isolation in this one, although the subject of the story seems to be poking fun at himself and everything involved in his incarceration, its like his mind is clear and can see the problem but the voices come and catch him out just when he feels secure driving him to self harm, as is said at the end this padded room is the end of him because when you're in there the door to freedom ceases to exist everywhere is the padding, great writing Aaron you got the sense of madness and seclusion just right :)
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8 Years Ago
Thank you very much Richard. I've had the opportunity to have to sit and observe and I guess keep s.. read moreThank you very much Richard. I've had the opportunity to have to sit and observe and I guess keep safe someone in a straight jacket and padded room. It's definitely crazy. I mentioned in another response I have talk to someone wanting to die and yelling out the craziest stuff you can imagine in 2 or 3 different voices then go back a week later and they are smiling and fine. It's definitely crazy to witness so I tried to create that kind of erratic thought process in this write. Glad you liked it :)
Distract, Depression, Distance with nature...
This is an outstanding write, Flowing and it is heating the mind.
Saddest but creative expression.
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Thank you very much Saddam... I tried something a little different... tried getting into the mind of.. read moreThank you very much Saddam... I tried something a little different... tried getting into the mind of someone in that situation. I have witnessed someone in a straight jacket and on suicide watch so it helps to see the truth in it. Thanks for your review my friend :)
This could be the description of someone locked up in a mad house. Nice job my friend.
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Yes indeed... I've actually has to watch someone on suicide watch before and in a padded room. It's.. read moreYes indeed... I've actually has to watch someone on suicide watch before and in a padded room. It's kind of a different and crazy feeling. One day the person wants to die and is trying to smash their head and speaking all kinds of crazy... then come back a few days later and they are telling stories ad laughing. Kind of an erratic mind that is uncontrollable. Glad you liked it IM :)
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..