Padded Walls

Padded Walls

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Something different... no not about me :)

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Wrap me up... strap me up

Throw away the key


Locked in a room, I lay to spoon

With a shadow of me


      Shut them up!!!

      Tell them to stop!!!

      These voices wont cease!


Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e

Thoughts unwind


Bite my tongue, just for fun

Where is my mind?


Pad these walls ignore the calls

I must be crazy


Hear the cries my soul lies

Visions hazy


       “Just do it

       kill yourself

       do the world a favor”

I cannot lie the voice inside

Says take my life

So I jump to fly

I fall and cry

But cannot die

So wrap me up, strap me up

Throw away the key

It’s obvious this padded room

Is the end of me,

 

 

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this writ.. read more
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Brilliant.. that's what I think of this 'different' piece.. scary but brilliant and vividly expressed. you're an amazing writer my friend..

Posted 4 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much buddy... I tried to do something a little different from a different perspective.. read more
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Deep Aaron, very deep!! I could almost believe you are about to . . . but phew!!! glad you are not!! Hi man, I'm back. Just brief reviews for a few days until I catch up, then back for real!! alf

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Sweet glad you're back! I am in the same boat got a ton of reviews to do also :) Thanks buddy!
alf

4 Years Ago

Thanks, my friend!!
Chaotic and gripping...perfect for me (y)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
Aaron, what an amazing poem! Pretty crazy and weird but at the same time amazingly put together! Thank you for sharing this! I really loved reading this one! :)
"wrap me up, strap me up
Throw away the key"

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much Madhu :) I tried my be a little creative and do something a little different :)
This poem is brilliant in the visualization and the deep and utter bewilderment. The pain, the darkness, splendid work and the ending was so abrupt, but definitely fitting of the style. Great job, would love to read more of your works!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Zoey :) This one was slightly different but I had a lot of fun with it :)
You have outdone yourself.... dark, gripping and absolutely haunting...
I'm at a loss for words. Absolutely brilliant writing.

Julie

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Julie... it was something I wanted to try... something a little different :) I am glad yo.. read more
WoW!!!
awesome write Aaron......
gripping......dark.......sad.....
whatever i do i hurt myself ...... so better lock me up for my own good.......
amazing poem.....
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Pushkar... there is a wide array of thoughts that came to mind when I saw this picture and.. read more
A interesting poem. A padded room. The ending for many. Many kinds of cages. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much... it was an idea I had so I just went with it. Appreciate your review buddy :)
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

You did well. I liked the poem and you are welcome.
This poem grabs the readers attention and i really like that!! Ive felt like this before, sir and it is n o t pretty. I pass on the good vibes bro.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank for the review.. sorry you felt like that I am sure it is not fun. :)
Very Compelling poem Aaron, really grabs the reader and throws them in the padded room feeling the anguish great job

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much... glad you got that feeling from reading these words :) Appreciate your review

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