Padded Walls

Padded Walls

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Something different... no not about me :)

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Wrap me up... strap me up

Throw away the key


Locked in a room, I lay to spoon

With a shadow of me


      Shut them up!!!

      Tell them to stop!!!

      These voices wont cease!


Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e

Thoughts unwind


Bite my tongue, just for fun

Where is my mind?


Pad these walls ignore the calls

I must be crazy


Hear the cries my soul lies

Visions hazy


       “Just do it

       kill yourself

       do the world a favor”

I cannot lie the voice inside

Says take my life

So I jump to fly

I fall and cry

But cannot die

So wrap me up, strap me up

Throw away the key

It’s obvious this padded room

Is the end of me,

 

 

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this writ.. read more
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Hey, Aaron. My, this piece. Dark and insane. Reminds me a bit of scizhophrenia. I wonder if the poem has something to do with it or it's just the raw screams from inside the tortured soul that's been hiding for so long. But, these lines kinda confuse me a bit: "So i jump to fly. I fall and cry but cannot die." I'm sure it's not meant to be taken literally, but i don't know what it's actually saying. Maybe you could provide some explanation? Overall, great writing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

I had a bit of that schizophrenic conversation thought in my mind when writing this which is why I a.. read more
jonah

4 Years Ago

woow thanks for the explanation too haha. it even gets better after reading your explanation of the .. read more
This is simply amazing. I have no words to describe what I felt while reading through the lines.
The last two lines sent a shiver down the spine. Its so sad, for some people, the four walls are the end of the world. One of the best poems I have read on writers cafe so far. Bravo :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much Nazia! You compliments mean a lot and really brightened up my day :) I am glad y.. read more
This is raw and riveting. The repetition of the first two lines completes the poem nicely. Captivating stuff from the title to the end of me.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Roland... I appreciate your review. I tried to do the erratic state of the mind some just.. read more
I really liked this. Thank you for sharing! Great flow, as well as painting a crystal clear image :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much Isabella :) I am glad you enjoyed it :D
I see what you mean, this one is quite different. I find the emotion portrayed is more harsh or jagged but captivating all the same.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much. The topic, someone being confined to a straight jacket in a padded room on suic.. read more
It's amazing.
Seriously.
This poem hits bad.
bad in a good way
keep it up :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much Ankita :) I am glad you enjoyed it :)
This has been one of my favorite poems I've read so far. I like how the first verse is repeated. I just can't seem to keep my eyes off of it to read it again. I love the placing of the punctuation, makes it so much more endearing. I feel my heart stop when I read it again and again. Beautiful and very well written.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Angela... you made my day :) This one is a little different for me but still the dark ton.. read more
The image in my mind as I was reading this was mind blowing. I pictured somebody, locked inside an asylum, screaming out with a tortured soul as the voices inside plucked away at his own self. Very powerful. Very beautiful. Thanks for sharing this!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much. That is the visual I was going for... to really see someone like that is a cra.. read more
Amazing insight into a mind tortured by life within and without. I sure relate which makes anyone's writing so very real and authentic, and you have just proved it, Aaron. Truly brilliant!

ps. I write and post, hardly ever editing....I enjoy putting 'pen to paper' in the moment, regardless of pleasing or displeasing the reader....writing from the heart is so very subjective anyways.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Marianne... I like doing the pen to paper majority of the time... I like the rawness for s.. read more
Marianne

4 Years Ago

Yes, I actually have a friend who puts my spoken word lyrics to music, so much fun for both of us de.. read more
AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Will do my friend :)
Pretty good, I like it. I think that the imagery it brings is very good.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

4 Years Ago

Thank you Michele I appreciate that. I tried my best to give the reader the best picture I could..... read more

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