Without you

Watching one of my fav shows... wrote some stuff for fun

This is probably a little past due,

but as I keep waiting for time

to heal these wounds… I only find

myself still missing you.

 

I know I was so far from perfect,

No matter how hard I tried…

I could never find happiness... yet it

kills when I see tears in your eyes.

 

I never wanted to hurt you,

Only a chance to love you.

But the harder I tried the 

farther away I pushed you.

 

Maybe I was never good enough.

 

So I found ways to cope and to

be happy momentarily… never

realizing the path of destruction

and heartbreak I would leave behind.

 

Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you.

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

Poignant piece. The pain and loss of relationship; something every human being experiences. Here you have captured its essence. The pleasure and pain, the truth and blame, elegantly written and evenly delivered. A wonderful poem from an excellent poet. Thank you for rr, and sharing your art.

Peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Todd... sorry for the late response haven't been on much buddy.

[zunie frost]

like it !!!! great poetry
90% rating from me

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Zunie... appreciate your review :)

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!!!!!

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

This work gets my tears dripping, I do relate to it. And as well sir, I ask for the "copy right" to make use of the last four lines in a message I am compiling to someone who tossed me for no reason I could tell. Nice job.... Bona!

[AaronFreitas]

Feel free to use those lines my friend :) This was a write full of self reflection and understanding life without someone you once loved. Glad you liked it :)

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

It's a pleasure sir, thanks.

[Bex Bries]

The entire time I was reading this, I began humming a melody to it, turning it into a pseudo song. Great job really capturing the depth of a loss. It definitely brought me inward.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :) I was feeling some type of way when I wrote this so it kinda helped me really understand the hurt and pain I was once in. Hmmm... I want to hear your melody now haha... I appreciate your review :)

[MissLaine]

OH man, breaks my heart really. :( The pain, the heartache... is definately shown so well. You truly captured the pain. Totally relatable and excellently written. Love this one.
=)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you MissLaine :) I am glad you liked it. I still gotta give my shot at an erotic write like you do... :)

[MissLaine]

:) no problem! hehee, i loved it. ooh yes! I would love to read that! such sexy-ness...steamy...hot.. hahaha yeah ;) try it~

[AaronFreitas]

haha will do and I will send it to you when I do :)

[MissLaine]

:) YAAAAAAY! I can't wait~

[B]

Speaking from experience nothing can damage the brain more than witnessing the one you love in pain
i would tolerate anything in the world but that

A wonderful piece Aaron

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Nisreen :) It was definitely a difficult time to go through and though it's mostly the past some of it still lingers. Thanks for your review :)

[Cassie]

I like be a better “me” without you. That is a good thing to say about some one

[AaronFreitas]

Yes it is... it's kind of the ultimate tribute to someone and what they do for you as a person. Thanks for your review Cassie :)

[marcus]

I think we can all relate to this piece!

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah... that's not always a good thing though haha... the lucky ones can't relate. Thanks buddy :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

powerful and potent.
So I found ways to cope and to
be happy momentarily… never
realizing the path of destruction
and heartbreak I would leave behind.

Loved those line.

As always awesome

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Crystal :) Those words are very true my friend... I still look for that happiness :)

[Tks]

Amazing write, Aaron, the longing and loss is poignantly encaptured into this piece. Such thoughts only cross the mind of the true romantic, and it is heartening to know you have such a spirit :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Tks :) I believe it's always easier to reflect back on choices and there's not really good or bad choices... just the consequence of each choice :)

[RomaJ]

The last stanza blew my mind. I really loved that. Very resonating piece.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Roma :) I am glad you liked it! It was just kind of a bunch of my feelings and I'm happy with how it turned out so I am glad you loved it :)

[RomaJ]

It was beautiful and a pleasure to read