Cry for Help

Cry for Help

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Here is something I wrote about 8 years ago... originally written to be a song back in the day but made a few adjustments to share.

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Nothing but my shadow staring back at me

I walk alone down these empty streets

A child nearby asks for change

To buy his fix, what a f*****g shame

 

Down the street… a w***e for sale

Searching for love, you couldn’t tell

Sex for crack is her way of life

Life’s clock is ticking waiting for her to die

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

A thieving bum worn to his destined domicile

Begs for forgiveness, yet lives in denial

No room for him in our over populated jails

He’s left to slowly descend into hell

 

A mother walks this forlorn street

Disappointed and crumbled in defeat

And even though she tries to hide her pain

You hear her cries bleed out in vain

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

Destructive behavior that will never be fixed

To these evil streets you are affixed

You take everything for granted like you do

What would you do if it happened to you?

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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It's a great write, about something we either change, or better get.used to it.
Since not everyone wants to do anything, other than point fingers, and wait for someone else to do something... I don't know what to do. let's not forget, that nothing, and no one forced these people to do what they do. (other than the prostitutes).
Whatever they go through, is just a simple consequence of their choices, and actions. Though i think we would need to help them. But then again, you, or i cannot do much on our own.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

You make a good point... in all honesty without a boatload of money the only things we really can do.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

you're welcome. :)
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i really like poetry that is true to live and simple in conveying it's meaning. sometimes things get to complex and i forget what i thought the point was..this however, says it all, as it is in almost every city etc. sadly i can't imagine anything will ever be done as governments love an underclass to pick on and blame for all their own screw ups. to a certain extend i think they are they by design..so sad to see. well done for pointint this out in some lovely words full marks

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much :) This is an old piece of mine that I shared for the first time but I actually.. read more
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Sad truth. Good question raised in the end.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thanks Vanessa :) I still haven't got to most my requests... just don't think I'm ignoring you I've.. read more
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8 Years Ago

No, I don't think so. It's alright. :) I'm only here occasionally, anyway.
Good write Arron. Well presented poem

Posted 8 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thanks buddy :)
Terrence Chang

8 Years Ago

Your welcome
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This is just brutally honest writing, Aaron.
We all see such things in our lives as you have mentioned here
And for the most part what do we do? A moments pause, and then onwards with our lives we go.
As humans we need to change this attitude or else we are lost.

Great writing, Aaron. Thanks for trying to make us see our folly.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thanks for your review and comments Doodley. Some people get to places we can't imagine and we thin.. read more
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8 Years Ago

My thoughts exactly. Keep the writing coming!
Great poem. I enjoyed your use of alliteration, it heightened the urgency.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is so packed full of meaning. Really thought-provoking and an amazing read. Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you Riley... glad you enjoyed my work :)
Shame must always be in mind, being ashamed of the bad ideas and behaviours is a key factor for preventing us from doing bad deeds. This was lovely yet painful for being the reality of the streets.

Insight

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much Insight :) Welcome back!
I have trouble discerning how you feel about these unfortunate people. In some verses I feel like you feel disdain for them, in others pity. I might also restructure some of the verses for rhythm. Often when I write poems I read the verses allowed and clap to them to see how they sound. But overall, some really nice ideas and interesting perspectives.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

I think my view of people in these situations is pretty open. I have known people and know family o.. read more
Ashley Flynn

8 Years Ago

Anytime :)
slaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you Khatoon :)
This is an amazing piece Aaron and I love the rawness to t great emotion...well done buddy :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

Thank you micky :) It's an older piece... I found my old writings so wanted to share it :)

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