Empty Soul

Originally a song I wrote way back Feb 10, 2008, changed a couple things so I could share. It was written about a specific moment in my life where things weren't good.

 

Nothing's ever perfect
Nothing's ever fair
I look into these eyes
And see this blank stare

Frayed since my creation
Abandoned from the start
My mother never loved my dad
And it breaks my f*****g heart!

Made to disappoint
Destined to fail
Created for your laughter
Only I could never tell

I am so pathetic
It’s so sad to see
I am just a worthless liar
but that’s what you made of me

That’s why you did it
That’s why you left me empty
Torn between my family
And it’s not sad for you to see

Why me? Why me?
What did I do to deserve this empty destiny?
Why me? Why me?
Take my empty soul and leave me free to be

You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul

 

Author's Note

Please share your thoughts :)

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Wow....I'd share a song to answer this, but it's not on English, and i couldn't translate yet. . so ....

i can relate to this, all too well. (except for being a liar.)

but, take a quick note, we're all here for you :)
you're not worthless.
:)
you're one of a kind. no one could even think about asking for a better friend :)

i loved the write
full rating

[Dani The Unreviewed]

www.writerscafe.org/writing/Danny15/1700613/ play tha song while reading :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

And you're welcome.

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my couch next to me I wanted to start playing haha... I appreciate your feedback buddy :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

hehehe : )

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I can definitely relate to this Aaron, and I love the raw of it...how you put it out there. So, (in your face) so strong...so poetic!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much lynn :) It's definitely a write full of raw emotions... appreciate your review :)

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

"Made to disappoint, Destined to fail" That's pretty sad stuff Aaron. but I think I know the feeling. Great job with this poem. I like it.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy for the review :) Glad you liked it :)

[Fate]

You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul

those lines are beautifully written!..
it hurts when someone leaves us .. I can feel it..
love your poem sir :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Fate... those are deep lines to me... almost have it finished to play it on guitar :)

[Fate]

I'd love to hear them sir ;)

[AaronFreitas]

haha maybe someday :)

[Fate]

it would be great :)

[Scrap]

Really bad state to be in. You nailed it! There's a lot of emotion behind this piece. This is me right now for other reasons. So Thanks for venting for me.

X

[AaronFreitas]

Anytime haha.... thanks for taking time to read and review. Most my writes come from some kind of emotion I've felt and the feelings I write with (for most) are real. It sucks that you can relate... but I am here anytime you want or need someone to talk to :)

[Scrap]

Haha. Thx ...

[Emily]

It sounds like a troubled soul in need of help finds solace in poetry after all. A really well-thought out piece!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Emily :)

[Tania]

Deeply expressed ,
enjoyed reading this :)
Great Job...!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... much appreciated :)

[Insight "MH"]

The things that happen to some people which make them break from inside out, then they see their lives are worthless, that is the empty hole and that is when they need helping hand to get them out of that miserable place. I hope no one will find him/herself alone in that state for too long. Nicely written!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Insight :) I agree with you my friend :) Appreciate your review

[Terrence Chang]

Dark and exquisite I must say. You have written it raw but has a lot of emotions running down.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Terrance :)

[Jessalynn]

WOW! What a powerful piece. Had to read it twice. Great job.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Jessalynn :) It's a piece that I enjoy and now I can play guitar and sing this one. Finally got it down the way I want. I appreciate your review :)

[Jessalynn]

Nice that's awesome. I've seen people link songs or videos to their poems you should defiantly do that :)

[AaronFreitas]

Haha I may have to try it :)

[Aly]

All I can say is damn... this is such an amazing piece. I can relate to every line, every word chills me. You did a great job! Maybe you can check out some of my writings and see if you feel the same. This is so touching

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Aly :) I definitely will... feel free to send me rr's for your favorite writes and I'll check em out. :)