A WONDERLAND WITHIN

A WONDERLAND WITHIN

A Poem by An owl on the moon
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So many perceive only surfaces...

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So many perceive only surfaces

only skin…

but she is a Wonderland within.

 

Chrysalis tea with a hatter’s cup

and more…

inside her live ten thousand doors.

 

Red queen, white queen shadowed

stormy cries…

she feeds me bread and butterflies.

 

A vast expanse of tranquil space

this etched ink…

dancing now through her folds of pink.       

 

We play in her gardens of delight

by roses red…

wildflowers make our untamed bed.

 

Drink me now and inhale us in

this frabjous day…

Sweet hookah in our minds will play.

 


© 2019 An owl on the moon


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Such a poetic and lovely read. You write very well. I love wonderland writes. Perfectly captured and unique. Love this, it flows oh so lovely as well.

Posted 1 Week Ago


So dreamily sensual...a lovely fantasy. This piece is playful and complex at the same time. I'm intrigued by your writing...I'll be back.

Posted 1 Month Ago


An owl on the moon

3 Weeks Ago

So thankful, Larq! Appreciate you visiting, and having the kindness to say you might just be back. :.. read more
Hey, another Wonderland piece! I loved the other one you wrote, and same goes for here. (I'm assuming you've listened to White Rabbit by Jefferson Airplane?) This feels like a combination of that mixed with early Pink Floyd, which is to say dreamlike and almost psychedelic -- appropriate given the subject material. I don't entirely understand the "ten thousand doors" line, you don't necessarily need to clarify it in the poem, but I'd like to know your thought process there.

Posted 1 Month Ago


An owl on the moon

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much, Hayley! Yes, wanting to make this a year of Wonderland. Listening again to White .. read more
Hayley

1 Month Ago

Thanks for clarifying! It's been a while since I've read Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, so forgiv.. read more
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“Inside her live ten thousand doors”- and it takes a special perception to truly fathom all of them. Alice in Wonderland is so special to me and your enchanting poem is so filled with the magical tapestry of it, dear Craig. Your eloquent, lyrical, beautifully rhymed verses traverse the mystical outer and inner workings of this iconic, ageless ingenue. You work your intricate language deftly, much like Carroll did. I absolutely, frabjously, love this poem! Masterpiece.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Annette Pisano-Higley

2 Months Ago

P.S. Margie introduced me to your wonderful write and I am so grateful to her for generously doing s.. read more
An owl on the moon

2 Months Ago

Hi Annette! Must say thank you for your kind words and to dear Margie too! Wonderland has been a pla.. read more
You write so beautifully with the last three lines intoxicatingly mind boggling.

Grace.

Posted 2 Months Ago


An owl on the moon

2 Months Ago

Dear Grace, what a joy to have you here. Thank you!
Grace

2 Months Ago

And what a joy to read your response Owl.

Grace.
Wow! I've said it before, and I'll say it again, your writing is how I aspire to write once I put my pen to paper, and my writing is how I end up.. :'))
This is so rich and pretty, and just a tiny bit crazy too!
Ps I think the last line doesn't fit that well, you've left so many easter eggs for Wonderland, that it sticks out a bit, because it is quite specific about the "indigo blue", and yet that doesn't relate to Wonderland (correct me if I've forgotten something though). It could have been forgotten, if it was an extraordinary line, but it does little to make the poem shine, makes for an unsatisfying end when the actual poem is so amazing.
I think the end line could be
"Drink me now, and eat me till you've had enough
Exhale me too in smoke rings of your hookah puff" or something to that effect (my example is only mediocre, and doesn't even scan😂. I think you can come up with a much better alternative)

With my love and admiration❤

Posted 4 Months Ago


An owl on the moon

4 Months Ago

Smiling... thank you! One of my favorite quotes says: “I like to imagine that the world is one big.. read more
Perhaps because it's easier to analyze everything superficially than to really dig in, which takes a special one ;)
I love the Wonderland references in your poems. Really takes the reader into that world. Lovely to read this one. :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


An owl on the moon

5 Months Ago

You understand so well, dear Yumna. So much of this life is on the surface... we only find the Wonde.. read more
This is beautiful! I really felt the love and understanding for the woman like she was apart of my own life! Oh the feelings!

Posted 5 Months Ago


An owl on the moon

5 Months Ago

Ah, so glad to have you by again, Rebecca! Thank you! :)
Stunningly elegant writing dear Craig. The wonderland with ten thousand doors that hold magic and a multitude of hues forever fascinating and free to access and to enjoy, but how many really come to know this wonderland within us? Your superb knowledge and imagination is beyond comparison, meu Querido amigo. Parabéns para uma poesia spectacular.

Posted 5 Months Ago


An owl on the moon

5 Months Ago

Minha Querido amiga! Always so happy to have your visit. May you always find those who want to journ.. read more
Mrudula Rani

5 Months Ago

Muito obrigada Querido amigo. Tudo de bom para você.

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2018 was a journey through my poetic novel, An Owl on the Moon. 2019 will find me going back to a deep inspiration for me... Wonderland... There's no such thing as time to kill Nor time to thr.. more..

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