You make poison taste like wine�

You make poison taste like wine�

A Poem by An owl on the moon
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Oh, those toxic relationships!

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You make poison taste like wine;

Make dying a breathtaking time.

 

Suffocating beauty draped in white

Drowning in your childlike light.

 

Feed me cakes with sugared shards;

Bury me alive in your crimson yard.

 

Your toxic skin is soft and warm;

In burning screams I fall deformed.

 

Stab me, shoot me; I don’t care…

I need your touch, your taste, your stare.

 

You make poison taste like wine...

© 2009 An owl on the moon


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Ouch! The title is captivating, color and choice of font makes this write even more inviting to read. I was truly drawn into this :
"Feed me cakes with sugared shards;
Bury me alive in your crimson yard." ~ Wonderful lines. This poems speaks of bittersweet love and fatal attraction to the extreme. Nice work.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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o wow. this is intense. an intensity that is capturing and amazing. i love the way you wrote this. how something toxic is so addicting.
i reallllllyy like this.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Wow, this is incredible!
I love all the metaphors you use to express your feelings.
Really beautiful poem, I love it!

Posted 15 Years Ago


i love the darkness of this poem. & the imagery of poison tasting like wine. this is different from most of your other poems i've read & it only shows how very talented you are. you can go from light to heavy easily as you've shown in this poem. we've all had those people in our lives, those we know are dangerous, but we just cannot tear ourselves away. darkly beautiful work. i loved it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Oh do I know this road... to be with someone you know is bad but you can't help wanting them... very well expressed... graceful but with an edge.

Posted 15 Years Ago


This was good. Toxic and deep.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Craig, I can't critique this. To be honest, I can't critique anything you write, ever. The passion and danger described cause a turbulent rise of lust and desire.

Is it hot in here????

Posted 15 Years Ago


Ooh I like this one a lot!!!!!! Much like most of the relationships I've been in :)

Isn't it strange how we sometimes feel that to die for Love is worth the fall instead of finding a Love that would never hurt us? Us humans are something strange...

Fantastic job, Craig. Something different from your usual stuff, but so totally enjoyable too...

Me

Posted 15 Years Ago


i like how you wrote about lust and how intoxicating it is.
love the title.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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