DANDELION RAIN

Age of innocence; age of lies

in bullet-screaming cobalt skies

Orchid lips of rasping joys

the smiles of six sentient boys

Children in red rose pain

dancing in the dandelion rain

Man with money, smell of power

ticking on the cutting hour

Takes our breath on streets of cold

and in that moment he takes our gold

Empires built on brittle bones

prices falling on our homes

Greed devours the hungry earth

strips her of her precious worth

A child died in the street last night

while others danced in money’s light

She died in the dandelion rain

Do you feel her pain? Feel her pain

Age of innocence; age of lies

now we watch as our innocence dies…

 

Author's Note

Dandelion rain suggests something beautiful but barren. Right now the world suffers from the greed and misuse of those who had been entrusted with our well-being. What now will be do to preserve a bright future for those who follow us?

Reviews

[Stephanie]

As usual it was a captive and stunning piece of work. But this time it really hit me hard because your message came across so strong. Something went wrong in the world and we don't pay attention anymore because we're too absorbed in ourselves.

"Greed devours the hungry earth
strips her of her precious worth
A child died in the street last night
while others danced in money's light"

That was the most gripping stanza. You have the gift of being able to get things, important things, across so easily and with such beautiful words even if the subject is our own carelessness. I am never not impressed with your work! This was no exception :] Amazing write Craig.

[cest la vie]

This poem just shouted "What are we doing, thinking, saying?"
We continue to take for granted our people, resources. You presented this so eloquently. Such a beautifully written piece, with a strong message. Once more, your words will move people. Thank you for this, Craig.


Lynne

[Tate Morgan]

Sing a song of sixpence a pocket full of rye.It flows like a song loved it
tate

[ALifeAquatic]

Thank you for entering this in, "Be Experimental," I love that this has a message to it most of what you read on Writer's Cafe while good lacks a message! The juxtaposition the title and then the imagery of the poem is brilliant!

Great read!

AHouseOfChambers

[mmzx]

i like your effort.
:D
great job!

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

OMG!!! I really love this one!! It might be my favorite by you!! This is really good!!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Very well written. A poetry form of Greed tearing down innocence.

[Gheeneil]

Dandelion represents contrasting views. A situation could either be wonderful or awful, depending on which angle one looks at it. And if, one considers to look at it from a different perspective, he'll have the idea, an overview, of what it feels like being exposed to such condition. This poem could perhaps describe the relationship between the prey and its predator. A well-written piece!

[Jinx's Heart]

You always have an amazing way with words that allow me to picture images very clearly as your poem dances around in my head. Your majestic words always seem to find a permanent mark in my mind. Excellent writing.

[Emily B]

the form accentuates the message well, excellent work here

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

EXCELLENT! i can tell you are skilled at the art of poetry. you are def no amateur. great word play, description, and i def nodded in agreement the whole time.

Man with money, smell of power

ticking on the cutting hour

Takes our breath on streets of cold

and in that moment he takes our gold

I LOVE THIS PART THE BEST. bec it reminds me of my ex and how he used me, took my money, and left me in misery. "takes our gold" ilike how you say that, instead of saying "took our money, etc" what a unique qy of putting it. i loved this poem. i gotta check you out even more.