The sun is jealous

The sun is jealous

A Poem by An owl on the moon

Based on a true story... or so says I...































Ì Hush golden sun is jealous of your smile     

Burns muted hot in your warmth for awhile…


Ì And wild ocean steals color from your eyes

In your stirring shadows, the blue waves rise…


Ì How the whistling wind whispers your name

Haunts deeping forests, dances blossoming plains…


Ì Each step you take caressingly skates the earth

Startling stones of fire lust quiver in untamed mirth…


Ì Thunderous chants in emotions of earth and isles

Hushed golden sun is so jealous of your smile…


© 2010 An owl on the moon

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well Craig you have done it again. You must be a romantic.
This is so romantic and just flows so easily.
Makes me imagine a man telling this to his woman as she lays there with her eyes closed. gosh
wow great poem
Thanks for sharing with me
Look forward to the next

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Superb! Lovely visions brought to life by beautifully crafted words. This is stunning.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Craig, such brilliant use of metaphors! You take simple images like the golden sun, the ocean, the wind and create a masterpiece out of them...and how much more romantic in spirit can anyone be than this?
"each step you take caressingly skates the earth
Startling stones of fire lust quiver in untamed mirth..."

Such luscious description of a lady's gait, her passion!

Posted 9 Years Ago

this flows really well and some great symbolism. Great vocabulary and good choice for your metaphores and personification used to paint a great picture of the power of nature. I'll be reading more of your writing....

Posted 9 Years Ago

This is a beautiful song of a love thats so strong, all else is grey and in shadows lay, for the brilliance of this love has out shone the sun....Excellent poetry

Posted 9 Years Ago

This poem is beautiful and sweet,
by the end a huge grin was planted on my face.
It really brightens the atmosphere.
Good work this piece is amazing!

Posted 9 Years Ago

I was amazed to know that you apparently talk just like you write. Your reviews are almost as beautiful as your poems. This one is incredibly clever, I love the way you incorporate nature into your work! Your poems make me feel so calm

Posted 9 Years Ago

Enchanting, and passionate.. I enjoyed this piece very much. Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Craig, Craig, Craig...I am new here and I am already a fan of your work...Tabula Rasa is a poem I can never, I repeat, never forget...And this poem-Is so beautifully rendered that a picture just forms before your eyes...A kaleidoscopic poem that is a s hallucinatory as it is addictive...

Posted 9 Years Ago

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wow! I really like this, perhaps my favourite from you, the lines:

"Each step you take caressingly skates the earth
Startling stones of fire lust quiver in untamed mirth…"

are brilliant!!

Posted 9 Years Ago

whilst the subject matter itself isn't original, this doesn't subtract from your skillful writing - once again, stunning imagery. Each picture you paint is effortless to imagine.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on November 27, 2010
Last Updated on November 30, 2010


An owl on the moon
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