I stood in the storm and swallowed the sky...

Tornado sirens sounded and I went outside to feel the sky wrap around me…

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sirens, first low-humming

rising, shrieking strumming at the sky

white fire scream-streaking growing

burning through the atmosphere

come the drums of flame

fierce burning, rumbling, deep

trembling clouds hovering

dancing in slow-motion tremors

frantic feelings fade to sacred awe

in the crispness of the air

scented breezes thrust and rush

breathing over my skin

tasting electricity in the wind

the earth alive and moving

birds soft-still and silent

as rain flees Cheshire clouds in panic

I stood in the storm

and swallowed the sky…

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Oh my goodness- how the lack of punctuation flows and scream into wildness! You've captured the moments, the weather, the atmosphere, the terror, then, almost unbelievably described the gradual calm after the tornado, the settling, the slowing,'tasting electricity in the wind ~ the earth alive and moving'; then .. that last line, that gloriously vast last line, '.. and swallowed the sky...' A very different style from you but as fine as ever was. Great picture too, following your Alice theme, plus a relevant poem because of the weather in parts of your country.

Many thanks for sharing, Craig!

[Susanna F]

Wow! This left me breathless, such a rush! From the fear and reaction to crisis to the end...a survivor, powerful. Amazing.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Fantastic imagery and brilliant concept, actually making the reader feel like being in a tornado. And I have had my brush with one or two to know exactly the feelings of being in one, myself. Nicely done!

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Every word swirled around me like a tempest, full of force and power, and left me in breathless awe. Very powerful piece of poetry.

[Richy Moon]

This writing was so real...I actually felt the wind! I was very detailed and very well written.

[Star Wolf]

This is very impressive writing. I really enjoyed reading this. Love the storm imagery in this.

[Poeticpiers]

A powerfully moving scribe that brings home to me the vast strength of nature and the puniness of man. But yet man defiantly stands in the storm

[M.Babu]

This my friend is the most beautiful, in my opinion that a storm has ever been described...the words are so polished! The flow is so smooth and honed to achieve such a wonderful complete reading! I think this line just did it for me:

"first low-humming
rising, shrieking strumming at the sky
white fire scream-streaking growing
burning through the atmosphere"

I liked this...ALOT!
Wonderful read my friend...

~M.Babu~

[?]

Seems like you have captured those Oklahoma/Arkansas storms perfectly.
Been in and seen so many. And now your discriptions make it seem as though I just came through another. Well penned

[hmm]

"I stood in the storm
and swallowed the sky"

I really enjoyed these powerful lines,
Simply a most awesome read.

[geekgoddess]

like the last two lines the most... a simple thing described beautifully