Death Drawings

Death Drawings

A Poem by Chelsea
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A poem about suicidal thoughts.

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Death Drawings

You sit, away in a corner

Alone, away from the lively

Huddled into awkward knots, you are

As if you were trying to contain yourself

From what? I’m unsure of.

You etch upon, a virgin sheet of paper

With a black inked pen

With a shaky hand and a fierce look

I see pictures of death

Raping the paper

I realize, this is what you want

To take a final breath.

 

 

© 2011 Chelsea


Author's Note

Chelsea
I tried to write about those suffering from the pressures of suicide. So dedicatd for anybody going through this---- Please tell me how I did & any thoughts on the topic of suicide?

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Very dark and well written. You captured the essance of this very well. So many people go through thinking to themselves if they should commit suicide, but I can tell you that going there and actually going through with it are two totally different ordeals. I myself have thought about it, but havent gone through with it. I keep thinking when I'm alone there has to be something out there that is better than the way I'm living. Granted I have my family for support, but I still wonder will it ever get better? Eventually, it does because you realize what is important in one's life. Again very well written as goes for the rest of your pieces.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Very good write. It was really dark, and it made me think. Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not much I can say that hasn't been said, it is dark, mysterious and very well written, good job

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very dark and well written. You captured the essance of this very well. So many people go through thinking to themselves if they should commit suicide, but I can tell you that going there and actually going through with it are two totally different ordeals. I myself have thought about it, but havent gone through with it. I keep thinking when I'm alone there has to be something out there that is better than the way I'm living. Granted I have my family for support, but I still wonder will it ever get better? Eventually, it does because you realize what is important in one's life. Again very well written as goes for the rest of your pieces.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dark and mysterious. I love it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Really strong and dark! Awesome job! And I think suicide should be talked about more, especially since teens are committing it more then ever. If people in school just realize that you have to treat people with respect, then the rates would drop!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Love the imagery. Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Suicide is touchy subject. A lot of people uses alcohol and drugs to find safety also. I could feel the pain and desire to find a unknown peace. A very good poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Hi,
This is really good. Kat24

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dang. That totally made drawing look criminal.
I guess i'll think twice next time I pick up a pencil1

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very Interesting topic. I mean I liked your take on the subject.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Chelsea
Chelsea

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