Stamps of Sin

Stamps of Sin

A Poem by Chelsea
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The title says it all!

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Stamps of Sin

Humanity marches

One foot in front of the other

Boots stamping out a rhythm

That seems to never break

Troop, troop, troop

 

Humanity marches

In rows of single file

Along a path of wrongs

That never seems to be cleansed

Troop, troop, troop

 

Humanity marches

The line broken

As quarrel breaks out

A routine that seems to be a given

Troop, troop, troop

 

Humanity marches

Clothed in sin

Breathing in filth

Troop, troop, troop

 

 

 

© 2011 Chelsea


Author's Note

Chelsea

This poem, I have no idea what to make of it. Just being a teenager, I always see the world as the same. All my teenage friends wear the same clothing, hoodies and jeans! That seems to be a uniform. Also it seems to be uniform to be mean. Humanity seems to get off on just pure evil. So I wrote a poem about always marching to the drums of evil. Never stopping and looking around! Also about the effect, it kind of leaves a stamp on you of evil. Or a tattoo kind of thing! Please review! Also I'm trying a new style, using stanzas, so would you mind giving me a bit on what you thought of them? Thanks (:
Thought I'd also mention, not my picture.

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clothed in sin is good trigger title....
the actions to protect seem wrong but when goodness stays silent - terrorism flourishes....america fights for her freedoms; every night we feel safe to go to bed; remember some aren't so lucky....unfortunately our troops have to sacrifice their freedom for ours....protecting our life of sin....


Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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this was really good writing here, i like this a lot. the marching sounds you've added really contribute to the whole atmosphere of the poem, and that's real nice. although i think it's a real debatable topic to whether humans are all scum deep down inside. while many would say yes, we still have many youths who are joining good causes now. that said, this poem really made me think. great work

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very clever title and I agree with you. Humanity has become evil.
Parents abusing children killing them... bullying others on and offline..corrupt government taking money from the people.. sex and politics and money and greed.. all go hand in hand.
I like the format. I mostly write freestyle. Using . 'troop, troop, troop adds to the impact..

"Humanity marches

In rows of single file

Along a path of wrongs

That never seems to be cleansed

Troop, troop, troop"

Troop, troop, troop marching in ther wrong direction.
Wonderful poem of awareness.

Chloe

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is an amazing piece of work! You have observed well the state of our schools as places to assimilate people, to iron out our unique qualities, to prepare us all to enter the workforce, as if we are slaves. It is time to break away. The title is great! You have created a powerful bit of poetry here.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is excellent! I like the thoughts you put together here.....you are an original.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A great poem that brought up a memory from my past. This reminds me of when I was in the U.S. Navy, and we would do military drill. It just seems perfect with the kind of imagery that you are trying to convey. Your emotions are quite apparent within the poem. I don't see how I would try to improve your poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Wisdom is better than weapons of war, but one sinner destroys much good"
Ecclesiastes 9:18

Your words made me think of this verse. It only takes one big corporation to bring this "Clothed in sin" or "Stamps of Sin" on a whole generation of people creating this "Troop, troop, troop" follower mentality. Thought provoking work any way you interpret it. Oh yes, I also really liked the "SOS" abbreviation in the title-- that's just way cool!

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Nice write in the form you have chosen! We must choose to march to a different beat........a beat of love and kindness and not be afraid to be "our own" person!
March on but not as the masses who adhere to principles of "me, myself and I"!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with it. I'm stick of everyone always fitting in and if you don't, people just say you're weird or strange or creepy. Thank you!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good write, Great symbolism, and I agree with you entirely The social society of today is evil and it forces evil things upon us.... Pop Culture isn't culture it superficiality... Great write

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a really good read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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