Dreams

Dreams

A Poem by Chelsea
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Dreams.

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Dreams

I’m off on a ship

It’s sailing in perfect harmony with the waves

The waves of my dreams

The ship’s blanketed

With a virgin sheet of white

Of the innocent child.

 

I’m off on a ship

Being tousled by waves

Night pitches creatures

That attack my boat

The boat no longer sails

It’s shipwrecked

On an island called reality.

 

 

© 2011 Chelsea


Author's Note

Chelsea
Just been feeling defeated about my dreams----
Tell me what you think :)

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Yess this is fantastic!!
okay so when we are children, we think that life will be so easy and can't wait to grow up, but in teen-age hood we realize that life's not just a walk in a park, this poem is so true! which is why I'm giving it 100/100! However, dreams may be hard to get, but as long as they aren't too irrational/dumb/etc, they can be got, so chelsea, I'm sure that you will be able to get yours!!!
:)
thought i'd mention this quote, as it is very inspirational and similar to this poem, 'I can't change the direction of the wind, but I can adjust my sails to always reach my destination.' ~ Jimmy Dean


Posted 11 Years Ago


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Everone feels that way inbetween the years. I constantly feel that, because what I'm aiming for goes against everything my parents had hoped I'd be. It's frustrating yet so true. I love the symbolism and clarity of your poem. Very nice. Keep it up.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Self-explanatory. You used some good metaphors and the symbolism of white. Very mature writing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Everyone can relate to this - how fantasy is usually WAY better then reality. I love the picture too!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great tribute to dreams! they can crush you when they break.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This write to me does not describe defeat - to me it feels like an escape, an intense longing to break free from the cold reality succeeded in dreams.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very true. Reality gets in the way all the time. But I figure...with enough dreams...with strong enough dreams...reality will punk out.
I loved this! Great job =)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So surreal!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice parallels and the metaphorical language is very ethereal. Sweet write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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i know how you feel. this is fantastically written. you put me right there in the water with you. wonderful poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very different. I would have liked to have read more.
Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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