Dreams

Dreams

I’m off on a ship

It’s sailing in perfect harmony with the waves

The waves of my dreams

The ship’s blanketed

With a virgin sheet of white

Of the innocent child.

 

I’m off on a ship

Being tousled by waves

Night pitches creatures

That attack my boat

The boat no longer sails

It’s shipwrecked

On an island called reality.

 

 

Author's Note

Just been feeling defeated about my dreams----
Tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[hannajade]

Yess this is fantastic!!
okay so when we are children, we think that life will be so easy and can't wait to grow up, but in teen-age hood we realize that life's not just a walk in a park, this poem is so true! which is why I'm giving it 100/100! However, dreams may be hard to get, but as long as they aren't too irrational/dumb/etc, they can be got, so chelsea, I'm sure that you will be able to get yours!!!
:)
thought i'd mention this quote, as it is very inspirational and similar to this poem, 'I can't change the direction of the wind, but I can adjust my sails to always reach my destination.' ~ Jimmy Dean

[YouoweYoupay]

Everone feels that way inbetween the years. I constantly feel that, because what I'm aiming for goes against everything my parents had hoped I'd be. It's frustrating yet so true. I love the symbolism and clarity of your poem. Very nice. Keep it up.

[The Analog Kid]

Self-explanatory. You used some good metaphors and the symbolism of white. Very mature writing.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Everyone can relate to this - how fantasy is usually WAY better then reality. I love the picture too!

[trainwreck]

Great tribute to dreams! they can crush you when they break.

[Liza]

This write to me does not describe defeat - to me it feels like an escape, an intense longing to break free from the cold reality succeeded in dreams.

[Brandon]

Very true. Reality gets in the way all the time. But I figure...with enough dreams...with strong enough dreams...reality will punk out.
I loved this! Great job =)

[Rose Masen]

So surreal!

[Tony]

Nice parallels and the metaphorical language is very ethereal. Sweet write!

[Heather D]

i know how you feel. this is fantastically written. you put me right there in the water with you. wonderful poem.

[JanieB]

Very different. I would have liked to have read more.
Great job!