Dreams

Dreams

I’m off on a ship

It’s sailing in perfect harmony with the waves

The waves of my dreams

The ship’s blanketed

With a virgin sheet of white

Of the innocent child.

 

I’m off on a ship

Being tousled by waves

Night pitches creatures

That attack my boat

The boat no longer sails

It’s shipwrecked

On an island called reality.

 

 

Author's Note

Just been feeling defeated about my dreams----
Tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[hannajade]

Yess this is fantastic!!
okay so when we are children, we think that life will be so easy and can't wait to grow up, but in teen-age hood we realize that life's not just a walk in a park, this poem is so true! which is why I'm giving it 100/100! However, dreams may be hard to get, but as long as they aren't too irrational/dumb/etc, they can be got, so chelsea, I'm sure that you will be able to get yours!!!
:)
thought i'd mention this quote, as it is very inspirational and similar to this poem, 'I can't change the direction of the wind, but I can adjust my sails to always reach my destination.' ~ Jimmy Dean

[littlelilypurplebride]

This is interesting but seems you're rushing into someting or life you're still young yet slow down. great write god bless lily

[Coyote Poetry]

Damn reality always take the sweet taste of a sweet dream away. A very good poem. Brought me in with beautiful words and left me the real world. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Sunflower 20]

i liked the metaphores of the ship and dreams, and i'm pretty sure lots of people have felt this way, including me. Just keep working towards your goals and don't get distracted, that would be my advise

[Jim Parson]

The progression from dream to nightmare to waking up to real life is an uneasy one, but you've made it smooth here. I can't even suggest anything to improve it.

[E.H. Monroe]

yup, this is what happens when you come up with something you can't remember about a dream you can't forget and its ruined by waking up. f**k reality...keep it swirly

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Everyone has dreams. Some are Attainable dreams, others are not. Sometimes one spends so much time worrying about their hopes and dreams, they begin to doubt the dream they so long for. I believe this was what you were trying to convey in your poem. The excellent symbolism of the ship tossed at sea, provides an excellent illustration of a ship tossed to and fro. The context of the White Virgin Sheet of an innocent child, must mean these dreams you have you have longed for since childhood, and had not yet achieved. Is it possible that the worrying keeps you from attaining this dream? could it be the dream has not been put into goals, Or could it be that the dream is attainable and you are rushing it? this is a question you will have to answer for yourself. My personal oppinion is, you are still young, and perhaps You are rushing. Sit back for a moment to meditate on your dream, then let your dream become apart of you. Then allow yourself to enjoy all the things nessicary to achieve the dream.Then maybe the dreams won't defeat you and your purpose will be completed. I love your poetry and this is truly an excellent write. Definately a favorite for my library and a 100/100 . Thank you for sharing!








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[Karli]

I love this! It's short, yet gets a message across. "It's shipwrecked on an island called reality"...perfect!!!

[Linear]

Now thats nice work, with lovely imagery, and yes dreams are wonderful but reality always comes knocking